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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.13

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 13
These days, most of the countries invest in transportation system which many passengers and commodities are transported through railways and roads. It is sometimes argued that trains should be given priority over cars. Such prioritizing, from my prospective, this essay will explore the importance of rail development compared to roads. First of all, the safety of passengers should be regarded as the first priority for the governments. As the statistics show, the number of road accidents is considerably more than the number of accidents which occur on the railways. Road accidents are one of the three main factors causes of death in Iran. For example, only in Iran every year, almost twenty thousand people are killed in road accidents. However, the fatalities in railways are less than fifty persons per year in the same country so rail transportation system plays an essential role. Secondly, using trains instead of private cars or public buses could reduce air pollution. Countries have developed railway system to encourage people use it which caused the rate of air pollution decreased by twenty percent. In addition, there are serious problems with the use of personal cars such as increased pollution, not only in the capital cities, but in most major cities in the world. In conclusion, it is assumed that rail is the most suitable option for transportation and governments are advised to put priority over railways than roads as it would improve travel safeties and would positively contribute to environmental problems.
These days, most of the countries invest in transportation system which
many
passengers and commodities
are transported
through
railways
and roads.

It is
sometimes
argued that trains should be
given
priority over cars. Such prioritizing, from my prospective, this essay will explore the importance of rail development compared to roads.

First of all
, the safety of passengers should
be regarded
as the
first
priority for the
governments
. As the statistics
show
, the number of
road
accidents
is
considerably
more than the number of
accidents
which occur on the
railways
.
Road
accidents
are one of the three main factors causes of death in Iran.
For example
,
only
in Iran every year, almost twenty thousand
people
are killed
in
road
accidents
.
However
, the fatalities in
railways
are less than fifty persons per year in the same country
so
rail transportation system plays an essential role.

Secondly
, using trains
instead
of private cars or public buses could
reduce
air pollution. Countries have developed
railway
system to encourage
people
use
it which caused the rate of air pollution decreased by twenty percent.
In addition
, there are serious problems with the
use
of personal cars such as increased pollution, not
only
in the capital cities,
but
in most major cities in the world.

In conclusion
, it
is assumed
that rail is the most suitable option for transportation and
governments
are advised
to put priority over
railways
than
roads
as it would
improve
travel safeties and would
positively
contribute to environmental problems.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
246 words
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