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Governments all over the world are now investing heavily in disease and illness treatment. However, health education and disease prevention should be prioritized as well. This essay will go over several reasons why governments should spend more money on health education and illness prevention.

Governments all over the world are now investing heavily in disease and illness treatment. However, health education and disease prevention should be prioritized as well. This essay will go over several reasons why governments should spend more money on health education and illness prevention. Wgg1b
Governments all over the world are now investing heavily in disease and illness treatment. However, health education and disease prevention should be prioritized as well. This essay will go over several reasons why governments should spend more money on health education and illness prevention. First, spending money just to treat a particular disease will not reduce the occurrence of that disease. It is clear that people will continue to get sick if the cause is not understood. This is because they don't know what they should or shouldn't do to avoid it. As a result, disease rates will remain. For example, the epidemic of covid 19 because of a lack of education and prevention about this disease much. Therefore, many people do not know how dangerous it is, so the disease is increasingly breaking out. On the other hand, when people are educated and prevented from getting sick and are aware of the causes of the most common diseases, they can make good choices about their lifestyle and diet. They will be more cautious about what they consume and do to avoid getting sick. Furthermore, by having knowledge of the symptoms, people can help detect the disease earlier and with less death. For example, the covid-19 epidemic was not widespread in Vietnam at the beginning of 2019. However, thanks to the government's active dissemination of information about COVID-19, its symptoms, and prevention, so The number of coronavirus cases has been steadily decreasing. In conclusion, I agree that governments should allow some budget for disease education and prevention. Because treating those diseases cannot reduce the appearance, awareness of the causes and symptoms of diseases can help people lead a healthier lifestyle.
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prevention
should
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governments
should spend more money on health
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education
and illness prevention.

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, spending money
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to treat a particular
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will not
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disease
. It is
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people
will continue to
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sick if the cause is not understood. This is
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because
they don't know what they should or shouldn't do to avoid it.
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,
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disease
rates will remain.
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covid 19
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, they can
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choices about their lifestyle and diet. They will be more cautious about what they consume and do to avoid getting sick.
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detect the
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disease
earlier and with less death.
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, the
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covid-19
epidemic was not widespread in Vietnam at the beginning of 2019.
However
, thanks to the
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government
's active dissemination of information about COVID-19, its symptoms, and
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prevention
,
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so
The number of coronavirus cases has been
steadily
decreasing.

In conclusion
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and
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.
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diseases
cannot
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can
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help
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people
lead a healthier lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Governments all over the world are now investing heavily in disease and illness treatment. However, health education and disease prevention should be prioritized as well. This essay will go over several reasons why governments should spend more money on health education and illness prevention.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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