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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.6

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 6
I disagree with the statement that government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. Every year, thousands of people die in road accidents. The number of people dying due to existing railway conditions are few. Road accidents are caused due to many reasons like, drivers not following traffic rules, over-speeding, etc. But the main reason, and the most avoidable reason is potholes. Potholes cause 80% of all road accidents in India. Most of the roads in India have potholes. Civilians are so frustrated with the number potholes that, a man from Bangalore dressed up in a spacesuit and pretended to be walking moon as the road was filled with potholes, resembling craters on the surface of the moon. Besides potholes, there are have been many cases where the road collapsed due to weak structure and heavy rains. In India, the roads are made to last just one rainfall in monsoons. In a country prone to malaria and dengue, potholes also pose a lot of health issues along with poor safety on the road. Along with health issues, potholes also cause traffic. A study established a direct link between sitting in traffic for long hours and increased stress. We also need to invest more in roads than railways to provide better connectivity to remote villages. Well built roads that last decades are much more economical than building railway lines to remote villages. This will remove the headache of operating and maintaining costs of railway stations. Connectivity through roads will provide people living in far off places a better life and expose them to many new opportunities and improve their existing living conditions. In conclusion, government should spend more money on roads than railways. Because roads reduce the number of accidents and improve connectivity to remote villages. They also, significantly improve the quality of life as well.
I disagree with the statement that
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government
should spend more money on
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railways
rather
than roads.

Every year, thousands of
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people
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die
in
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road
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accidents
. The number of
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people
dying due to existing
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railway
conditions are few.

Road
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accidents
are caused
due to
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many
reasons like, drivers not following traffic
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rules
, over-speeding, etc.
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But
the main reason, and the most avoidable reason is
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potholes
.
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Potholes
cause 80% of all
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road
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accidents
in India. Most of the
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roads
in India have
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potholes
. Civilians are
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so
frustrated with the number
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potholes
that, a
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man
from Bangalore dressed up in a spacesuit and pretended to be walking moon as the
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road
was filled
with
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potholes
, resembling craters on the surface of the moon.
Besides
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potholes
, there are
Consider using a past participle here: "had".
have
been
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many
cases where the
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road
collapsed due to weak structure and heavy rains.

In India, the
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roads
are made
to last
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just
one rainfall in monsoons. In a country prone to malaria and dengue,
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potholes
also
pose
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a lot of
health issues along with poor safety on the
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road
. Along with health issues,
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potholes
also
cause traffic. A study established a direct link between sitting in traffic for long hours and increased
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stress
.

We
also
need to invest more in
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roads
than
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railways
to provide better connectivity to remote villages.
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Well built
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roads
that last decades are much more economical than building
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railway
lines to remote villages. This will remove the headache of operating and maintaining costs of
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railway
stations. Connectivity through
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roads
will provide
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people
living in far off places a better life and expose them to
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many
new opportunities and
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improve
their existing living conditions.

In conclusion
,
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government
should spend more money on
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roads
than
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railways
.
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Because
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roads
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reduce
the number of
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accidents
and
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improve
connectivity to remote villages. They
also
,
significantly
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improve
the quality of life
as well
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 6

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
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