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Government should help artists or not or

Government should help artists or not or mLYxL
On the salad days of the millennium, society is polarized into two groups almost equally regarding the notion that whether Government should help the artists or not. Different people have their distinct mindset. In the following essay would shed light on both the approaches. To commence with the first notion, Government should assist the artists because they lead a vulnerable life. Artists are the art of society, play the role of ambassador. They couldn't earn more m oney, that's why they need help from the government.
On the salad days of the millennium, society
is polarized
into two groups almost
equally
regarding the notion that whether
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the artists or not.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have their distinct mindset. In the following essay would shed light on both the approaches. To commence with the
first
notion,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should assist the artists
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they lead a vulnerable life. Artists are the art of society, play the role of ambassador. They couldn't earn more
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m oney
, that's why they need
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
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IELTS essay Government should help artists or not or

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
86 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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