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Government need to spend more money on roads rather than on Railway it

It is is very common with majority of countries to have huge amount of budget for railways as compared to roads. These governments claim that, it is worth to be focused more on railway construction than road construction. This essay will argue the entirely benefits available of railways. There is tendency to believe that making better road infrastructure may lead to some satisfaction. To be more precise, human always been wanted to live in comfortnes. For instance, people are having more fun to be gotten around in personal vehicles rather than to travel in public transport. It has been recorded that 40% of the world population love to be entertained by having their own vehicle and feel sense of security. Overall, people loves travelling or commute journey (home and office) in own car, especially, in long distance journey. Certainly, it seems to me that spending money to constuct vaste and huge roads may benifit certain demographic of society; however, it is open way to risk troubles. By this I mean, worst pollution can be the consequence of moving your own car as well as may lead to accident issues. Statistic shows that a third of the pollution cause is the emissions of vehicles. To conclude that, its likely to notice driven more vehicles lead to serious worries. In summary, I could be argued that government should have to concern more about railways rather than road. Despite the fact that roads has some benefits for limited portion of the people.
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common with
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majority of
countries to have huge amount of budget for railways as compared to
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roads
. These
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governments
claim that, it is worth to
be focused
more on railway construction than
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road
construction. This essay will argue the
entirely
benefits available of railways.

There is tendency to believe that making better
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road
infrastructure may lead to
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some
satisfaction. To be more precise, human always
been wanted
to
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live
in
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comfortnes
.
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,
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people
are having more fun to
be gotten
around in personal
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vehicles
rather
than to travel in public transport. It has
been recorded
that 40% of the world population
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love
to
be entertained
by having their
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own
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vehicle
and feel sense of security.
Overall
,
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people
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loves
travelling or commute journey (home and office) in
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own
car,
especially
, in long distance journey.

Certainly
, it seems to me that spending money to
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constuct
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vaste
and huge
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roads
may
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benifit
certain demographic of society;
however
, it is
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way to
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troubles. By this I mean,
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worst
pollution can be the consequence of moving your
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own
car
as well
as may lead to accident issues. Statistic
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shows
that a third of the pollution cause is the emissions of
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vehicles
.
To conclude
that,
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its
likely to notice driven more
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vehicles
lead to serious worries.

In summary, I could
be argued
that
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government
should
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have to
concern more about railways
rather
than road.

Despite the fact that
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roads
has
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some
benefits for limited portion of the
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people
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IELTS essay Government need to spend more money on roads rather than on Railway it

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
249 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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