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2. 3. In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the recent years, the number of students continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges have multiplied as well. This essay believes that the provided statement is a positive development. This essay will discuss both view points. In many countries the number individuals who have decide to further do their under graduation studies has increased. Along with which the number of courses provided by the universities and colleges has increased. In a positive view, this implies that their is a increase in the human capital of a country. For example, India having one of the most highest number of youth has taken action to invest in them in order to provide the country with a bright future. However, due to this sudden increase in student the application for getting into a educational institution has become more competitive and tough for the students who wish to study there. For instance, The recent data of acceptance and rejection of applications in India, shows that more than 60% of students do not get into their chosen university or college. This doesn’t allow the individual to enhance and improve his/her skills in the field. For example, A recent study in Australia shows that more than 45% of people aren’t able to enhance their professional skill due to limited places in the educational facilities. Therefore, the accelerating number of students and courses available is a positive development of the near future of a country as well as the world.
In the recent years, the
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of
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students
continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges have multiplied
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. This essay believes that the provided statement is a
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positive
development. This essay will discuss both view points.

In
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many
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countries
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number
individuals who have
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to
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do their under graduation studies has increased. Along with which the
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number
of courses provided by the universities and colleges has increased. In a
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positive
view,
this implies that
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is
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a
increase in the human capital of a
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country
.
For example
, India having one of the
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most highest
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number
of youth has taken action to invest in them in order to provide the
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country
with a bright future.

However
, due to this sudden increase in
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student
the application for getting into
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a
educational institution has become more competitive and tough for the
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students
who wish to study there.
For instance
, The recent data of acceptance and rejection of applications in India,
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shows
that more than 60% of
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students
do not
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get
into their chosen university or college. This doesn’t
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allow
the individual to enhance and
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improve
his/her
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skills
in the field.
For example
, A recent study in Australia
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shows
that more than 45% of
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people
aren’t able to enhance their professional
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skill
due to limited places in the educational facilities.

Therefore
, the accelerating
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number
of
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students
and courses available is a
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positive
development of the near future of a
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country
as well
as the world.
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IELTS essay 2. 3. In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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