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Government need to focus on their own people rather than providing foreign aid. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Government need to focus on their own people rather than providing foreign aid. doxO6

Government must improve their citizen's life more better and focus on country development rather than giving foreign aid. I strongly agree with this statement because it will become a burden on the nation in terms of their own growth and the possibility of making the situation stable by helping them is also very less. Firstly, providing help to other nations needs millions of dollars for their development, security maintenance. Consequently, it will become a huge burden on helping country and it will affect their own progress in the long term. For instant, if Russia giving donations to any developing country in the long term, then their own economy and development will affect negatively. Secondly, there are very few chances for a state to become stable with foreign aid and army supply that is suffering from rebels and internal instability due to corruption or looting foreign aids by different rebel groups. In addition, money maybe goes into the wrong hand and make the situation more worse instead of helping them. For example, the USA and UN spent billions of dollars for vanishing terrorists In Afghanistan and make the situation stable but the result is not as excepted. Overall, it is better if the country focuses on its own progress by making living conditions more better for its denizens and invest that money in their various sectors like defence trade, agriculture because helping other nations does not benefit their own country in any way instead it will cause some problems and internal instability in their own country.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
Government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 their citizen's life Use only "better" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.better
more better
 and focus on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 development rather
 than giving foreign aid. I strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this statement This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it will become a burden on the nation in terms of their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 growth and the possibility of making the situation stable by helping them is also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 less.

Firstly
, providing This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 to other nations needs millions of dollars for their development, security maintenance. Consequently
, it will become a huge burden on helping You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 and it will affect their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 progress in the long term. For instant, if Russia giving donations to any developing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 in the long term, then their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 economy and development will affect negatively
.

Secondly
, there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 few chances for a state to become stable with foreign aid and army supply that is
 suffering from rebels and internal instability due to corruption or looting foreign aids by This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 rebel groups. In addition
, money maybe goes into the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:incorrect
wrong
 hand and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 the situation Use only "worse" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.worse
more worse
instead
 of helping them. For example
, the USA and UN spent billions of dollars for vanishing terrorists In Afghanistan and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 the situation stable This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the result is not as excepted.

Overall
, it is better if the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 focuses on its This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 progress by making living conditions Use only "better" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.better
more better
 for its denizens and invest that money in their various sectors like Possible spelling mistake. 'defence' is British English.defense
defence
 trade, agriculture This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 helping other nations does not benefit their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 in any way instead
 it will cause This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 problems and internal instability in their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
. 