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government make rule to safe people danger for example wear seat belt in car or not allowing smoking in public biulding. however many peole belive that to many rules.nowadays To what extent do you agree or disagree

government make rule to safe people danger for example wear seat belt in car or not allowing smoking in public biulding. however many peole belive that to many rules. nowadays m3Kp8
Rules and regulations are necessary for the well being of citizens. Government has the responsibility to maintain certain laws in order to protect the people from dangers of accidents or eradicate the possible consequences of smoking. Although it may consider by some that irrelevant, it should be weighed against the advantages. To begin with, despite of having minor inconvenience due to many rules, it should be weighed against the safety aspect of the people and social beings. Hundreds of accidents occur due to drunken driving. Since there are many laws to control the driving under the influence of alcohol, it should be followed, even if it affects our freedom. Those who give more preference to their freedom, they should play with their own life and that of others. Similarly, smoking is not just create health issues among the smoker, but it also affects the people those who inhales the fume. If a pregnant woman smoke or inhale, baby may have serious congenital abnormalities. Hence, regardless of our inconvenience, we should follow laws which implemented for the welfare of humans. In addition, littering and spitting is considered as serious offence in Singapore. For example, country like India not give much emphasis on public hygiene, that makes the Singapore become the most beautiful and cleanest city in the world. Since laws are not strict in India to keep surroundings neat and tidy, people would not follow the law. However, having too much laws seems unnecessary. In such situations, people have the rights to raise their voice against such rules. Any sensible government will make alterations in the law, or even remove it. In conclusion, in spite of our inconvenience, people should be followed rules because it is essential for the smooth functioning of any society. If these laws are absent, people will do a lot of harms and even they would not afraid of anything.
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Rules
and regulations are necessary for the
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well being
of citizens.
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Government
has the responsibility to maintain certain
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laws
in order to protect the
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people
from
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dangers
of accidents or eradicate the possible consequences of smoking. Although it may consider by
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some
that irrelevant, it should
be weighed
against the advantages.

To
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begin
with,
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despite of
having minor inconvenience due to
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many
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rules
, it should
be weighed
against the safety aspect of the
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people
and social beings. Hundreds of accidents occur due to drunken driving. Since there are
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many
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laws
to control the driving under the influence of alcohol, it should
be followed
, even if it affects our freedom. Those who give more preference to their freedom, they should play with their
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own
life and that of others.
Similarly
, smoking is not
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just
create health issues among the smoker,
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but
it
also
affects the
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people
those who inhales the fume. If a pregnant woman smoke or inhale, baby may have serious congenital abnormalities.
Hence
, regardless of our inconvenience, we should follow
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laws
which implemented for the welfare of humans.

In addition
, littering and spitting
is considered
as serious
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offence
in Singapore.
For example
, country like India not give much emphasis on public hygiene, that
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makes
the Singapore become the most
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beautiful
and cleanest city in the world. Since
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laws
are not strict in India to
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keep
surroundings neat and tidy,
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people
would not follow the law.

However
, having too
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much
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laws
seems unnecessary. In such situations,
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people
have the rights to raise their voice against such
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rules
. Any sensible
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government
will
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make
alterations in the
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law
, or even remove it.

In conclusion
,
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in spite of
our inconvenience,
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people
should
be followed
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rules
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because
it is essential for the smooth functioning of any society. If these
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laws
are absent,
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people
will do
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a lot of
harms and even they
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would not afraid
of anything.
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IELTS essay government make rule to safe people danger for example wear seat belt in car or not allowing smoking in public biulding. however many peole belive that to many rules. nowadays

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