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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.21

These days, the government spends a large part of its budget not only on public services, but also the arts. Although I agree that it is important to spend money on public services, I do not think spending on the arts is a waste of money. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of the government budget on public services. First and foremost, public services are the things such as hospitals, roads and schools, and these things determine the quality of life that most of us will have. For example, if the government does not spend enough money on hospitals, the health of our society may decline. Similarly, if not enough money is spent on schools, our children may not be properly educated. Also, it will be the poor in our society that will be affected more if we do not spend enough on these things because they are the ones more dependent on such services. However, this does not mean that the arts should be completely neglected. To begin, it is difficult for many arts institutions to generate much profit, so without some help from the government, many theatres and other such places may have to close. Moreover, the arts also have an important impact on our quality of life. Many people get great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances so it is important that the government assists such institutions so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public. To sum up, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment goes into public services as this influences the quality of life for nearly all of us. That said, I do not believe spending money on the arts is a waste of money as this too provides important benefits.
These days, the
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,
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. Although I
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important
to
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on
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public
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, I do not
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think
spending on the
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arts
is a waste of money.

There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of the
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government
budget on
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public
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services
.
First
and foremost,
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public
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services
are the things such as hospitals, roads and schools, and these things determine the quality of life that most of us will have.
For example
, if the
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government
does not
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spend
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enough
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money
on hospitals, the health of our society may decline.
Similarly
, if not
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enough
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money
is spent
on schools, our children may not be
properly
educated.
Also
, it will be the poor in our society that will be
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affected
more if we do not
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enough
on these things
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because
they are the ones more dependent on such
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services
.
However
, this does not mean that the
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arts
should be completely neglected. To
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begin
, it is difficult for
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many
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arts
institutions to generate much profit,
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so
without
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some
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help
from the
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,
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many
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theatres
and other such places may
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have to
close.
Moreover
, the
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arts
also
have an
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important
impact on our quality of life.
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Many
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people
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get
great pleasure in going to
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see
music and
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theatre
performances
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so
it is
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important
that the
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government
assists such institutions
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so
that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public.

To sum up, there are
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clear
benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment goes into
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public
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services
as this influences the quality of life for
nearly
all of us. That said, I do not believe spending
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money
on the
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arts
is a waste of
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money
as this too provides
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important
benefits.
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IELTS essay Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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