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Global warming is rising a lot .extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Global warming is rising a lot. extent 8LM2G
A certain number of people think that global warming is the most alerting problems we have right now while some of them feel that cutting forests is more harmful for the world too. Global warming is a vexing issue although, deforestation has also destroyed the atmosphere a lot. This essay will discuss how both issues are dangerous for us. Excessive emission of the harmful smoke from automobiles and industries that consume fossil fuels are the major causes of the global warming. Nevertheless, there is no restriction on them by the Governments. In addition, the smoke coming out from industries and automobiles contains lots of dangerous chemical gases like Nitrogen, Oxygen, Sulphur and many more. Moreover, gases like chlorofluorocarbons commonly known as CFCs is present in the spray bottles for instance; pesticides, insecticides etc. Despite the fact that global warming has rose the temperature of the world, it also has melted many glaciers in Antarctica which has drastically increased the water levels of the oceans. According to a research, 30 million people are at risk to leave their homes due to the increasing water levels. On the other hand, deforestation is also one of the major problems of the world. Plethora of trees had been cut down in order to have more space to live or to make products out of the wood from trees. Cutting trees can lead to serious problems for the environment, even though, many people are still doing the same. Enormous amounts of animals had been died due to this. Furthermore, many rare animals have been extinct from the world. In China, for example, only few pandas have left. This happens because of the deforestation on such large scale. They had made highways over forests despite of the fact that hundreds of animals live there. In conclusion, many people think that global warming is the most alarming for the world while there are many who feel that deforestation is major issue as compared to global warming. Although, in my opinion I think that both issues are really dangerous for us and we have to do something on order to eliminate them otherwise living in this world can be really challenging for all the human beings as well as other living organisms.
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think
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global
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warming
is the most alerting problems we have right
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now
while
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some
of them feel that cutting forests is more harmful for the
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world
too.
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Global
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warming
is a vexing
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issue
although,
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deforestation
has
also
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destroyed
the atmosphere a lot. This essay will discuss how both
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issues
are
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dangerous
for us.

Excessive emission of the harmful smoke from automobiles and industries that consume fossil fuels are the major causes of the
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global
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warming
.
Nevertheless
, there is no restriction on them by the
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Governments
.
In addition
, the smoke coming out from industries and automobiles contains lots of
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dangerous
chemical gases like Nitrogen, Oxygen,
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Sulphur
and
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many
more.
Moreover
, gases like chlorofluorocarbons
commonly
known as
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CFCs
is present in the spray bottles
for instance
; pesticides, insecticides etc. Despite the fact that
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global
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warming
has
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rose
the temperature of the
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world
, it
also
has melted
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many
glaciers in Antarctica which has
drastically
increased the water levels of the oceans. According to a research, 30 million
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people
are at
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risk
to
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leave
their homes due to the increasing water levels.

On the other hand
,
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deforestation
is
also
one of the major problems of the
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world
. Plethora of trees had been
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cut
down in order to have more space to
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live
or to
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make
products out of the wood from trees.

Cutting trees can lead to serious problems for the environment,
even though
,
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many
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people
are
still
doing the same. Enormous amounts of animals had been
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died
due to this.
Furthermore
,
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many
rare animals have been extinct from the
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world
. In China,
for example
,
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only
few pandas have
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left
. This happens
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because
of the
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deforestation
on such large scale. They had made highways over forests
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despite of
the fact that hundreds of animals
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live
there.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
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think
that
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global
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warming
is the most alarming for the
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world
while there are
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many
who feel that
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deforestation
is major
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issue
as compared to
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global
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warming
. Although, in my opinion I
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think
that both
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issues
are
really
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dangerous
for
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us and
we
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have to
do something on order to eliminate them
otherwise
living in this
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world
can be
really
challenging for all the human beings
as well
as other living organisms.
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IELTS essay Global warming is rising a lot. extent

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
374 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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