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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? v.13

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? v. 13
It is certainly true that major cause effect on our planet at the present time that is global warming. There are several negative points for this cause and various measures can be taken by the government and individuals to improve this situation. Climate change brings people some drawback. Firstly, deforestation is a factor impact on the warming of the earth. To illustrate, green plant photosynthesis to offer the oxygen for people; however, a vast number of trees now has been completely destroyed, subsequently it cannot resolve all the CO2 in the environment. Secondly, private transport is also one of the causes for increasing global temperature. Because of using a great deal of vehicles per day; thus, a huge amount of waste gases is coming out, and it affects the environment. There is some solution to solve these cases. On the one hand, the government plays a vital role in protecting the environment. In order to prevent forest clearance, the authorities should impose some laws against cutting down trees illegally, such as long-term prison and strict fines. Furthermore, the government should encourage people to plant more green trees, On the other hand, citizen also contribute reducing global warming. For example, the method for this cause is that individuals should use bike cycle rather than other cars as it is environmentally friendly. In conclusion, people are faced with some causes increasing global temperature, but thanks to the efforts and cooperation of the government and individuals, this issue will be helped to improve.
It is
certainly
true that major
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cause
effect on our planet at the present time
that is
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global
warming. There are several
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negative
points for this
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cause
and various measures can
be taken
by the
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government
and individuals to
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improve
this situation.

Climate
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change
brings
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people
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some
drawback.
Firstly
, deforestation is a factor impact on the warming of the earth. To illustrate, green plant photosynthesis to offer the oxygen for
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people
;
however
, a vast number of trees
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now
has been completely
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destroyed
,
subsequently
it cannot resolve all the CO2 in the environment.
Secondly
, private transport is
also
one of the
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causes
for increasing
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global
temperature.
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Because
of using a great deal of vehicles per day;
thus
, a huge amount of waste gases is coming out, and it affects the environment.

There is
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some
solution to solve these cases. On the one hand, the
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government
plays a vital role in protecting the environment. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
forest clearance, the authorities should impose
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some
laws against cutting down trees
illegally
, such as long-term prison and strict fines.
Furthermore
, the
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government
should encourage
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people
to plant more green trees,
On the other hand
, citizen
also
contribute reducing
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global
warming.
For example
, the method for this
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cause
is that individuals should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
bike cycle
rather
than other cars as it is
environmentally
friendly.

In conclusion
,
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people
are faced
with
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some
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causes
increasing
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global
temperature,
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but
thanks to the efforts and cooperation of the
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government
and individuals, this issue will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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