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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans faced in the 21st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this? What are some possible solutions? v.1

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans faced in the 21st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this? What are some possible solutions? v. 1
Although some people argue that children have to spend time playing outdoors. This phenomena, however, is difficult to be complete. Nowadays, many kids have little time to explore the natural life because of spending many activities indoors. This essay will discuss the importance of learning from nature in order to be can comprehend and appreciate environment with full responsibility. Numerous parents prohibit their kids to playing outside home with several reasons. They consider about a health issue like bacteria or virus in public playground can affect serious illness. Furthermore, a crime of risk or studying obligation for children can be the other reasons. Nevertheless, human completely depend on nature. It provides myriad people's need. Therefore, this is vital for students to interact with the surrounding environment. For instance, pupils who play outside more will understand easily how plant's life cycle is or where water come from. It is vital for human to know that there are other creature on the earth. As a result from this unbeatable fact, man lives side by side with animal and plant. Hence, people have to keep and maintain the environment together. Children who spent activity outside more will appreciate the earth wholeheartedly and sincerely, though they still a kid. For the example, pupils who follow social activity to clean the seashore from trash own a deep understanding about how garbage affect tremendous problems to sea creatures or even human. In conclusion, it is no doubt that spending time outdoors is very essential for children. It comes with several benefits such as they can understand their surroundings and also they have empathy to others very well.
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have to
spend time playing outdoors.
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kids have
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little
time to explore the natural life
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of spending
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activities indoors. This essay will discuss the importance of learning from nature in order to be can comprehend and appreciate environment with full responsibility.

Numerous parents prohibit their kids to playing outside home with several reasons. They
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consider about a
health issue like bacteria or virus in public playground can affect serious illness.
Furthermore
, a crime of
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risk
or studying obligation for
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children
can be the other reasons.
Nevertheless
, human completely depend on nature. It provides myriad
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people
's need.
Therefore
, this is vital for students to interact with the surrounding environment.
For instance
, pupils who play outside more will understand
easily
how plant's life cycle is or where water
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come
from.

It is vital for human to know that there are other
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creature
on the earth.
As a result
from this unbeatable fact,
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man
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lives
side by side with animal and plant.
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people
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have to
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keep
and maintain the environment together.
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Children
who spent activity outside more will appreciate the earth
wholeheartedly
and
sincerely
, though they
still
a kid. For the example, pupils who follow social activity to clean the seashore from trash
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own
a deep understanding about how garbage affect tremendous problems to sea creatures or even human.

In conclusion
, it is no doubt that spending time outdoors is
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very
essential for
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children
. It
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comes
with several benefits such as they can understand their surroundings and
also
they have empathy to others
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very
well.
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IELTS essay Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans faced in the 21st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this? What are some possible solutions? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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