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Global phone mobile sold by brand

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The barchart provides the data on the five different mobile phones sold globally in millions in the year 2009, 2011, 2013 respectively. Overall, Samsung and Apple had risen they sale gradually during these years of 2009, 2011 and 2013. While in contrast, Nokia and LG showed a decline. On the other hand, the brand ZTE slight increase in their sales. In 2009, The Brand Nokia hit its highest around 440 millions which was followed by samsung with 220 millions in sales. The Apple has suffered with less than 20 millions sales in the same year, whilst LG and ZTE has a minimum sales approximately 120 and 50 when compared to Apple. Nokia maintains its first position in sales in 2011 which is more than Samsung with 90 millions. Apple and LG witnessed equal sales of around 90, with ZTE performing least with 50 millions The brand samsung gained its popularity in 2013 marking its position to first with 450 than nokia with slight difference of around 10 millions. Apple showed a gradual increase in its sales when compared with the previous year. Following the similar trend, ZTE performed better slightly, Whereas, LG incurred a dip of around 80 millions
The
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barchart
provides the data on the five
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different
mobile phones sold globally in
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millions
in the
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year
2009, 2011, 2013
respectively
.

Overall
, Samsung and
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Apple
had risen they
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sale
gradually
during these years of 2009, 2011 and 2013. While
in contrast
, Nokia and LG
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showed
a decline.
On the other hand
, the brand
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ZTE
slight increase in their sales.

In 2009, The Brand Nokia hit its highest
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around
440
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millions
which
was followed
by
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samsung
with 220
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millions
in
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sales
. The
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Apple
has suffered with less than 20
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millions
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sales
in the same
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year
, whilst LG and
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ZTE
has a minimum
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sales
approximately 120 and 50 when compared to Apple.

Nokia maintains its
first
position in
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sales
in 2011 which is more than Samsung with 90
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millions
.
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Apple
and LG witnessed equal
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sales
of
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around
90, with
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ZTE
performing least with 50
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millions


The brand
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samsung
gained its popularity in 2013 marking its position to
first
with 450 than
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nokia
with slight difference of
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around
10
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millions
.
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Apple
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showed
a gradual increase in its
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sales
when compared with the previous
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year
. Following the similar trend,
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ZTE
performed better
slightly
, Whereas, LG incurred a dip of
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around
80
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millions
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IELTS essay Global phone mobile sold by brand

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
198 words
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