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Given the importance of communication skills educating children, to be a beneficial person in Society, become an argument in recent years. some claim schools are the best way for education while others believe parents are best teachers for this subject.

Given the importance of communication skills educating children, to be a beneficial person in Society, become an argument in recent years. some claim schools are the best way for education while others believe parents are best teachers for this subject. Nyolb
The crucial role of parents in children's education is by no means negligible. They have an important role in this process, however educating children's merely by parents is not the best way owing to this fact that, parents are not educated for this, it means they are not skilled in educating children, consequently it is inevitable students misunderstandings in different subject. For instance, about the teaching social skills because parents are not knowledgeable it is probable that they guide children incorrectly which result in several crises like problems in self-esteem. in addition, parental education means kids are limited to home environment without communicating with other peers which directly leads to main issues in children's social skills. As a result, they become more and more isolated and unsociable. On the other hand, schools are the best place for children's education. Considering to this point that. Students are toughed by expert people who have tertiary education, thereby they are experienced in teaching. Moreover, school environment is a best place to students will improve in terms of communication skills. They can relate to other students and can have an opportunity to make new friends as well. As a result, they become more sociable which directly effect on being the good members of society. To summarize, there are two opinion for educating children; parents and school. I believe that teaching children by qualified people in schools environment is more eficient in children nurturing to become a benefial members of society.
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is by no means negligible. They have an
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educating
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merely
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parents
is not the best way owing to this fact that,
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parents
are not educated for this, it means they are not skilled in educating
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children
,
consequently
it is inevitable
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students
misunderstandings in
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, about the teaching social
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skills
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because
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parents
are not knowledgeable it is probable that they guide
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children
incorrectly
which result in several crises like problems in self-esteem.
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in
addition, parental
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education
means kids
are limited
to home environment without communicating with other peers which
directly
leads to main issues in
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children's
social
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skills
.
As a result
, they become more and more isolated and unsociable.

On the other hand
,
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schools
are the best place for
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children's
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education
. Considering to this point that.
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are toughed
by expert
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people
who have tertiary
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education
, thereby they
are experienced
in teaching.
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,
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environment is
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a
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students
will
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improve
in terms of communication
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skills
. They can relate to other
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students
and can have an opportunity to
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make
new friends
as well
.
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, they become more sociable which
directly
effect on being the
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good
members of society.

To summarize
, there are two opinion for educating
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children
;
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parents
and
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school
. I believe that teaching
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children
by qualified
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people
in
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environment is more
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in
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children
nurturing to become a
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benefial
members of society.
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IELTS essay Given the importance of communication skills educating children, to be a beneficial person in Society, become an argument in recent years. some claim schools are the best way for education while others believe parents are best teachers for this subject.

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