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My name is Cagatay. I am 24 years old. I was born and grew up in Izmir city. I was lived 20 years in Izmir. I was lived 20 years in Izmir. I have a small family. I have a mother, father, and brother, them live in Izmir. I won a University in Mugla city and then I moved the Mugla in 2017. I studied Local Government for two years. I was a graduated associate degree and then I passed the bachelor's degree in Kutahya Dumplupınar University, Department of Political Science and International Relations. I study in there for two years. Also, I continue studying. I moved to Eskisehir then after Mugla. I going to every Thursday. I have a face-to-face lesson in every Thursday and online lessons in Wednesdays and Saturdays. I was worked somewhere this time, but now I am not working. I was started the IELTS exam and every Sunday I have an English Lesson. I hope next year in 2022, I am great speaker. Because I want to study Master's degree in Estonia. So, University wants to IELTS result minimum of 6. 0 points. I preparing the this exam.
My name is
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Cagatay
. I am 24 years
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old
. I
was born
and grew up in Izmir city.
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I
was
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lived
20 years in Izmir.
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I
was
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lived
20 years in Izmir.
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I
have a
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small
family.
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I
have a mother, father, and brother, them
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live
in Izmir.
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I
won a University in
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Mugla
city and then I
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moved
the
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Mugla
in 2017.
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I
studied Local
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Government
for two years.
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I
was a graduated associate degree and then I passed the bachelor's degree in
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Kutahya
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Dumplupınar
University, Department of Political Science and International Relations.
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I
study in there for two years.
Also
, I continue studying. I
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moved
to
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Eskisehir
then after
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Mugla
.
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I going
to every Thursday.
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I
have a face-to-face lesson in every Thursday and online lessons in Wednesdays and Saturdays.
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I
was worked
somewhere this time,
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but
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now
I am not working.
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I
was
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started
the IELTS exam and every Sunday I have an English Lesson.
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I
hope
next
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year
in 2022, I
Please check whether an article is missing: "am a great" or "am an great"
am great
speaker.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
I want to study Master's degree in Estonia.
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So
, University wants to IELTS result minimum of 6. 0 points.
Did you mean "I'm preparing", "I am preparing", or "I was preparing"?
I preparing
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the this
exam.

IELTS essay give information about your life

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
193 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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