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There are many opinions about whether we feel happy when we are young or when we are old. Some people say that we feel happy when we are young because then we can enjoy life in a way that old people cannot feel. In my own opinion, this opinion is completely reasonable. First of all, it's a good idea to enjoy life while you're young. Because the youth of each person is not long, if not quite short. During this time, when we have enthusiasm and passion, we go to explore new lands, discover pleasures such as mountain climbing, camping in the forest, . . . but only when we full of energy and health then we can enjoy. Next, when we are young, we don't have too many things to think about, for example, saving money for our children and grandchildren, saving money when we get sick, saving money to buy a house, buy a car, . . . All those things we have to think about when we are old, and they make our life more tiring when we get old and make life more boring when we can't fully enjoy life.
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the youth of each person is not long, if not quite short. During this time, when we have enthusiasm and passion, we go to explore new lands, discover pleasures such as mountain climbing, camping in the forest
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IELTS essay gettind old makes people's live better

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
194 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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