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genetics or fat issues knakfnalkmfalfa

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we can't accuse the parent for their obese children due to the fact that it maybe the cause of genetics. a lot of the kids in our world suffer from their weight and we complain that their mother and father being lazy and not working on their kids diet or habit of eating. a recent study showed that 45% of the kids nowadays have genetics issues that make them gain fat faster than a normal child would be. and I personally saw that in many of my relatives and friends.
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can't
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accuse the parent for
their obese children due to the fact that it maybe the cause of genetics.
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a
lot of the kids in our world suffer from their
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weight and
we complain that their mother and father being lazy and not working on their kids diet or habit of eating.
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a
recent study
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showed
that 45% of the kids nowadays have genetics issues that
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make
them gain
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fat
faster than a normal child would be. and I
personally
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saw
that in
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of my relatives and friends.

IELTS essay genetics or fat issues knakfnalkmfalfa

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
88 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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