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From my studies in Ritsumeikan APU, I hoped that I could be someone who can bring new changes and impact to the world, especially my home country Indonesia. Being born and raised in Indonesia made me realize how hard it is to live here and wanted to help Indonesia’s economy, since nowadays the main city Jakarta is filled with homeless people that are desperate to get a new job, thus making me more motivated to change how things were and that is why I hope that my studies in Ritsumeikan APU could teach me to create a non-governmental organization and help people in needs.
From my studies in
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Ritsumeikan
APU, I hoped that I could be someone who can bring new
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changes
and impact to the world,
especially
my home country Indonesia.
Being born
and raised in Indonesia made me realize how
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hard
it is to
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live
here and wanted to
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help
Indonesia’s economy, since nowadays the main city Jakarta
is filled
with homeless
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people
that are desperate to
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get
a new job,
thus
making me more motivated to
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change
how things were and
that is
why I hope that my studies in
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Ritsumeikan
APU could teach me to create a non-governmental organization and
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help
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people
in needs.

IELTS essay future goals towards world economy

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