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Frightening moment in your life

Frightening moment in your life VrQ6m
One of the most frightening moment in my life is dog bite. I was bitten by a dog when I was eighteen years old. It was my neighbour's dog that I know and play with it. I am sad from it. When I was coming back from tutor, I saw a dog running me. I stopped and couldn't say a word. It is said that If the dog barks you, you have to sit to the ground. Where you are and the dog which is barking you will recant from biting. I sat to the ground. Unfortunately, the dog didn't stop running me and it snapped my leg. I didn't feel pain only I felt frightening. I was frightened. My leg wasn't bleeding because of frightening then I stopped frightening and saw blood coming my leg without stopping. My neighbour who is owner of the dog gave me some maya. My leg is good now but I was marked by the dog on my leg. I still fright from my neighbour's dog. Even though, It is an old dog now. My frightening will not end. If the dog dies, I will stop frightening. On the other hand there is one thing that dogs are friends for people than some kind of people.
One of the most
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that I know and play with it. I am sad from it. When I was coming back from tutor, I
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running me. I
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stopped
and couldn't say a word. It
is said
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dog
barks you, you
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which is barking you will recant from biting. I sat to the ground. Unfortunately, the
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didn't
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running me and it snapped my
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. I didn't feel pain
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I felt
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. I
was frightened
. My
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wasn't bleeding
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then I
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gave me
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on my
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dog
.
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old
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dog
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now
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frightening
will not
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dog
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dies
, I will
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stop
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there is one thing that
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than
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kind of
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IELTS essay Frightening moment in your life

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
212 words
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