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Fresh water supply and problems

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The ultimate source of life on this planet is water. It is impossible to live on earth without water. Now, it is becoming increasingly difficult to obtain freshwater due to a variety of factors. The purpose of this essay is to discuss the explanations for the increased demand and responsibility of government and individuals for this problem. Some of the causes of freshwater scarcity include water overuse, pollution of water, lack of infrastructure, and climate change. Freshwater from rivers and lakes has been increasingly used since the industrial revolution for cleaning equipment, chemical reactions, and so on. The world's population is growing, and so is its water demand. A shortage of groundwater can also result in water resource loss. Thus, water scarcity has become an increasingly global issue. Every problem has suitable solutions. To build a sustainable freshwater resource use system, governments must set maximum sustainable limits for water consumption and water pollution in river basins and aquifers to ensure an appropriate balance between people and nature. As a result, the government should also create infrastructure for the purification of seawater into freshwater that is saline-free, adding to the growing demand for clean water. In addition, people must limit their daily household water usage. In conclusion, the government also released a suitable law for freshwater resources. Then, all of the people must follow the rules. The only way to solve problems is for people to follow the rules for a long time.
The ultimate source of life on this planet is
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water
. It is impossible to
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live
on earth without
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water
.
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Now
, it is becoming
increasingly
difficult to obtain freshwater due to a variety of factors. The purpose of this essay is to discuss the explanations for the increased demand and responsibility of
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government
and individuals for this problem.

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Some of the
causes of freshwater scarcity include
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water
overuse, pollution of
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water
, lack of infrastructure, and climate
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change
. Freshwater from rivers and lakes has been
increasingly
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used
since the industrial revolution for cleaning equipment, chemical reactions, and
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so
on. The world's population is growing, and
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so
is its
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water
demand. A shortage of groundwater can
also
result in
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water
resource loss.
Thus
,
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water
scarcity has become an
increasingly
global issue.

Every problem has suitable solutions. To build a sustainable freshwater resource
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use
system,
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governments
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must
set maximum sustainable limits for
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water
consumption and
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water
pollution in river basins and aquifers to ensure an appropriate balance between
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people
and nature.

As a result
, the
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government
should
also
create infrastructure for the purification of seawater into freshwater
that is
saline-free, adding to the growing demand for clean
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water
.
In addition
,
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people
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must
limit their daily household
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water
usage.

In conclusion
, the
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government
also
released a suitable law for freshwater resources. Then,
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all of the
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people
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must
follow the
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rules
. The
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only
way to solve problems is for
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people
to follow the
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rules
for a long time.

IELTS essay Fresh water supply and problems

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
242 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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