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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? bVWP
There are some countries where people have been struggling to find fresh and drinkable water for a very long time. At the present time, this epidemic is becoming a pandemic due to growing demand for fresh water everywhere. This essay will provide 2 main causes for the pandemic and 2 solutions to tackle this issue. First of all, the world is getting more populated by each day and the need for water is increasing simultaneously. Sadly, our world has limited resources of fresh water and because of overpopulation, humans might struggle with finding water in the upcoming years. For instance, in 2010 the population of the world was 6 billions and right now it is almost 7 billions. Secondly, the overall rain-fall all over the world has decreased because of global warming. One of the most important recourses of fresh water is the rain and low values of rain-fall is the second most important reason why the demand for fresh water has increased. Fortunately, as humans are responsible for the most common causes of draught and water shortage, they can be ones to take measures and help mature nature to restore it’s water resources. One solution to this problem is to educate individuals about their daily water consumption and carbon foot print. For example, people can be educated through campaigns, mandatory seminars, tv documentaries and commercials. What is more, schools can dedicate 2-3 classes monthly to teach children about how to use water efficiently and the methods they can follow to reduce their carbon foot prints. As children tend to continue their habits when they they grow up, teaching them these habits at young age will be a successful method of dealing with such issues in the long run. Another possible solution is for governments to increase the taxes on water usage all over the world and funding organisations which are trying to stop global warming. To conclude, in order to keep up with increased water demand, individuals and governments should take immediate action together to ensure human’s survival in plant earth, as the water is essential for human life.
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some
countries where
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people
have been struggling to find
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fresh
and drinkable
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water
for a
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very
long time. At the present time, this epidemic is becoming a pandemic due to growing demand for
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fresh
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water
everywhere. This essay will provide 2 main causes for the pandemic and 2 solutions to tackle this issue.

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First of all
, the
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world
is getting more populated by each day and the need for
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water
is increasing
simultaneously
.
Sadly
, our
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world
has limited resources of
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fresh
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water
and
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because
of overpopulation,
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humans
might struggle with finding
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water
in the upcoming years.
For instance
, in 2010 the population of the
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world
was 6 billions and right
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now
it is almost 7 billions.
Secondly
, the
overall
rain-fall all over the
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world
has decreased
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because
of global warming. One of the most
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important
recourses of
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fresh
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water
is the rain and low values of rain-fall is the second most
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important
reason why the demand for
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fresh
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water
has increased.

Fortunately
, as
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humans
are responsible for the most common causes of
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draught
and
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water
shortage, they can be ones to take measures and
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help
mature nature to restore it’s
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water
resources. One solution to this problem is to educate individuals about their daily
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water
consumption and carbon foot print.
For example
,
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people
can
be educated
through campaigns, mandatory seminars,
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tv
documentaries and commercials.
What is more
, schools can dedicate 2-3 classes monthly to teach children about how to
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use
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water
efficiently
and the methods they can follow to
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reduce
their carbon foot prints. As children tend to continue their habits when
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grow up, teaching them these habits at young age will be a successful method of dealing with such issues in the long run. Another possible solution is for
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governments
to increase the taxes on
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water
usage all over the
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world
and funding
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organisations
which are trying to
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stop
global warming.

To conclude
, in order to
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keep
up with increased
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water
demand, individuals and
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governments
should take immediate action together to ensure
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human’s
survival in plant earth, as the
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water
is essential for
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human
life.
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IELTS essay Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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