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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v.9

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v. 9
Of late, there has been a humongous demand for fresh aqua, in contrast with its decreasing natural level. This has now become a serious matter for all governments around the world, the below paragraph will try to elucidate the reasons for the problem and propose handful remedies to overcome this problem. To commence with the reasons for shortage of fresh water. First and foremost, the main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas. As a result, the global phenomenon of urbanization has led to the global surge in potable water requirement. Secondly, increased pollution of natural fresh water reserves due to urbanisation and industrialization has compounded this demand. In fact, since the beginning of industrialization, fresh water from rivers and lakes has been increasingly used for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipments and so on. Furthermore, in modern times, the growing use of salt free water for activities like recreational swimming, have also catalysed the surge in global water demand. For instance, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts use an avalanche of water. Therefore, water scarcity has risen and is now a global problem. Undoubtedly, every lock has a key, similar some solution should be implemented. First of all, national authorities, can control this surge by implementing public education schemes regarding controlled water usage. Therefore, Strict national legislations for preventing natural fresh water reserve pollution are also required. Moreover, the government should also set up infrastructure for purification of seawater into saline free water, which will help in meeting the growing requirement of fresh water. A good example is UAE where desalination plants have been used for many years to provide fresh drinking water. Similarly, the public can also contribute towards this noble cause by conserving water and also by limiting their daily household water usage. They should refrain themselves from performing activities that will pollute natural fresh water reserves. In conclusion, even though, the scarcity of fresh water is a growing global problem, there are various means and methods available, by which both the government and individuals can prevent this from worsening.
Of late, there has been a humongous demand for
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fresh
aqua,
in contrast
with its decreasing
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natural
level. This has
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now
become a serious matter for all
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governments
around the world, the below paragraph will try to elucidate the reasons for the problem and propose handful remedies to overcome this problem.

To commence with the reasons for shortage of
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fresh
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water
.
First
and foremost, the main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas.
As a result
, the
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global
phenomenon of urbanization has led to the
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global
surge in potable
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water
requirement.
Secondly
, increased pollution of
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natural
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fresh
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water
reserves due to
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urbanisation
and industrialization has compounded this demand. In fact, since the beginning of industrialization,
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fresh
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water
from rivers and lakes has been
increasingly
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used
for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipments and
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so
on.
Furthermore
, in modern times, the growing
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use
of salt free
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water
for activities like recreational swimming, have
also
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catalysed
the surge in
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global
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water
demand.
For instance
, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts
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use
an avalanche of
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water
.
Therefore
,
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water
scarcity has risen and is
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now
a
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global
problem.

Undoubtedly
, every lock has a key, similar
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some
solution should
be implemented
.
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First of all
, national authorities, can control this surge by implementing public education schemes regarding controlled
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water
usage.
Therefore
, Strict national
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legislations
for preventing
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natural
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fresh
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water
reserve pollution are
also
required.
Moreover
, the
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government
should
also
set up infrastructure for purification of seawater into saline free
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water
, which will
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help
in meeting the growing requirement of
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fresh
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water
. A
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good
example is UAE where desalination plants have been
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used
for
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many
years to provide
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fresh
drinking
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water
.
Similarly
, the public can
also
contribute towards this noble cause by conserving
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water
and
also
by limiting their daily household
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water
usage. They should refrain themselves from performing activities that will pollute
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natural
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fresh
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water
reserves.

In conclusion
,
even though
, the scarcity of
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fresh
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water
is a growing
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global
problem, there are various means and methods available, by which both the
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government
and individuals can
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prevent
this from worsening.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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