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free education and healthcare by government

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Over the past few centuries, due to specialization of jobs, importance of awareness and widespread occurrence of contagious disease, human being have figured out the importance of knowledge and well-being, so that they are ready to pay to obtain both. Nevertheless, many hold the belief that it is the government that should take the responsibility of providing these services for its citizens free of charge. I completely agree with this statement when it comes to health, although this positive insight is partial as far as education is concerned. In this essay, I will discuss my justifications for sticking to such viewpoint along with drawing a final closing for it. First, I will start by looking at notions of free education supporters. Advocates of this view say that not only current day job positions have become specialized, but also awareness and being well informed are basics of making progress in any society. That is to say, although civil engineers’ existence for urban construction, petroleum engineers for not selling our precious row material and making much higher benefit out of it, mechanical experts for making ourselves self-sufficient in vehicle assembly for example, etc. are an essentiality, but even a basic level of literacy is crucial for blue-collar jobs like carpentering or piping in order to not only to be able to do their calculation, but also educated people will make better community by leveling up their power of perception and appreciation. For instance, this is true for countries owning resources and lacking experts, like Arab countries around Persian Gulf. On the other hand, many people feel that such approach can make people to take this service for granted that leads to unwillingness to make effort in acquiring necessary skills for their future career. They argue that paying hard-earned money for something can force you to make the most of it. To illustrate, I’ve seen that university students pass all their exams at their first taking a course, while those studying for free, fail times and again. With respect to health and well-being, I’m totally in favor of such idea because they’re healthy people who can make a progressive country and vibrant economy by providing workforce. Furthermore, in some developing and underdeveloped nations expenses of medical service is so high that a huge proportion of them will be unable to afford, albeit in case of facilities’ availability, especially in poor ones that even state is suffering from financial crisis let alone rural peasants. To exemplify, I can mention what adverse effect COVID-19 had on economic status of even rich countries and how many experts and imminent scholars and civil servants particularly health workers were lost for it. And if it was not for the COVAX program assisting less-fortunate countries, we still has tremendous number of death toll in Africa. All in all, providing free medical care and schooling aren’t negative steps towards achieving a modern and well-off society. Education as foundation of development by creating experts and healthcare by taking care of these specialists are vital to be provided without profit. Personally, I believe free schooling until a high school degree and cure and treatment for the whole life of any resident is absolutely essential. However, in case of getting university fee we should make an exception for those with poor family and background.
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that they are ready to pay to obtain both.
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,
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many hold
the belief that it is the
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government
that should take the responsibility of providing these services for its citizens
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free
of charge. I completely
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agree
with this statement when it
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comes
to health, although this
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positive
insight is partial as far as education
is concerned
. In this essay, I will discuss my justifications for sticking to such viewpoint along with drawing a final closing for it.

First
, I will
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start
by looking at notions of
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free
education supporters. Advocates of this view say that not
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only
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current
day job positions have become specialized,
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but
also
awareness and being
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well informed
are basics of making progress in any society.
That is
to say, although civil engineers’ existence for urban construction, petroleum engineers for not selling our precious row material and making much higher benefit out of it, mechanical
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experts
for making ourselves self-sufficient in vehicle assembly
for example
, etc. are an
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essentiality
,
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but
even a basic level of literacy is crucial for blue-collar jobs like carpentering or piping in order to not
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only
to be able to do their calculation,
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but
also
educated
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people
will
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make
better community by leveling up their power of perception and appreciation.
For instance
, this is true for
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countries
owning resources and lacking
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experts
, like Arab
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countries
around Persian Gulf.

On the other hand
,
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many
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people
feel that such approach can
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make
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people
to take this service for granted that leads to unwillingness to
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make
effort in acquiring necessary
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skills
for their future career. They argue that paying
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hard
-earned money for something can force you to
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make
the most of it. To illustrate, I’ve
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seen
that university students pass all their exams at their
first
taking a course, while those studying for
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free
, fail times and again.

With respect to health and well-being, I’m
totally
in favor of such
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idea
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because
they’re healthy
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people
who can
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make
a progressive
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country
and vibrant economy by providing workforce.
Furthermore
, in
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some
developing and underdeveloped nations expenses of medical service is
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so
high that a huge proportion of them will be unable to afford, albeit in case of facilities’ availability,
especially
in poor ones that even state is suffering from financial crisis
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let
alone rural peasants. To exemplify, I can mention what adverse effect COVID-19 had on economic status of even rich
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countries
and how
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many
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experts
and imminent scholars and civil servants
particularly
health workers
were lost
for it. And if it was not for the
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COVAX
program assisting less-fortunate
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countries
, we
still
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has
tremendous number of death toll in Africa.

All in all, providing
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free
medical care and schooling aren’t
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negative
steps towards achieving a modern and well-off society. Education as foundation of development by creating
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experts
and healthcare by taking care of these specialists are vital to
be provided
without profit.
Personally
, I believe
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free
schooling until a high school degree and cure and treatment for the whole life of any resident is
absolutely
essential.
However
, in case of getting university fee we should
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make
an exception for those with poor family and background.
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IELTS essay free education and healthcare by government

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  American English
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