Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Fossil fuels are used in many countries. Other countries use alternative sources of energy, such as wind and solar power, which is encouraged. To what extent is this positive or negative development? v.1

Fossil fuels are used in many countries. Other countries use alternative sources of energy, such as wind and solar power, which is encouraged. v. 1
Nowadays many of fossil fuels are commonly used in many areas and due to such heavy usage, it damages environment heavily. To save the environment, many countries have improved the natural resources such as wind and solar power that substituted use of fossil fuels. Therefore, in my opinion, I believe that the alternative forms of energy usage are a positive development. Majority of products that we are using daily have consisted of fossil fuels. For instance, cars, airplane, electricity plans, medicine, cosmetics, plastics and heating systems have included of use of fossil fuels. About 21. 3 billion tonnes of carbon dioxide had been produced from fossil gases in the US only in the year of 2015, because of daily usages. Due to this heavily usage, it appears that it is urgent in searching for the alternative forms of energies to replace fossil gases. Many countries have developed the alternative forms of energies to replace the usage of fossil gases. For example, in the UK and Australia have introduced the natural gases as the main form of public transportations, whereas the durable consumer goods that using natural gases have invented in the US. The market for this natural resource is increasing rapidly and it seems the usage of fossil fuels would be reduced in the future. Hence, the persistent research on natural energy usage can make the environment greener. Even though there are still required to conduct further researches to make these natural resources to be usable in a daily lifestyle, it is definite that it does not release any harmful gases to the atmosphere. For example, wind and solar powers are limited in use due to weather conditions and this is where scientists are working in progress in this recent century. Therefore, this has brought the positive development especially in environmental perspective. In conclusion, we are living in an environment where most of products are made and used to create the toxic emissions to the air. The result of affecting the environment is terrifying and it would be recommend using alternative forms of energies such as natural resources to make the environment healthier. We are in the progress of making the natural energies to be available in daily lifestyles which has a positive effect to environment.
Nowadays
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
are
commonly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
areas and due to such heavy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usage
, it damages
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
heavily
. To save the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources such as wind and solar power that substituted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
Therefore
, in my opinion, I believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forms
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usage
are a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development.

Majority of products that we are using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
daily
have consisted of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
For instance
, cars, airplane, electricity plans, medicine, cosmetics, plastics and heating systems have included of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
. About 21. 3 billion tonnes of carbon dioxide had
been produced
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gases
in the US
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in the year of 2015,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usages
. Due to this
heavily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usage
, it appears that it is urgent in searching for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forms
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energies
to replace
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
gases.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
countries have developed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forms
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energies
to replace the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gases
.
For example
, in the UK and Australia have introduced the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gases
as the main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
form
of public transportations, whereas the durable consumer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
that using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gases
have invented in the US. The market for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
resource
is increasing
rapidly
and it seems the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
in the future.
Hence
, the persistent research on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
usage
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
greener.

Even though
there are
still
required to conduct
further
researches to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources to be usable in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
daily
lifestyle, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
definite
that it does not release any harmful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gases
to the atmosphere.
For example
, wind and solar powers
are limited
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
due to weather conditions and this is where scientists are working in progress in this recent century.
Therefore
, this has brought the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development
especially
in environmental perspective.

In conclusion
, we are living in an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
where
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the products") or simply say "most products".
most of products
are made
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to create the toxic emissions to the air. The result of affecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
is terrifying and it would be
Consider using the past participle "recommended"?
recommend
using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forms
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energies
such as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
healthier. We are in the progress of making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energies
to be available in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
daily
lifestyles which has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effect to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels are used in many countries. Other countries use alternative sources of energy, such as wind and solar power, which is encouraged. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
376 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts