Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that people pay more attention as well as money to historical and cultural attractions. Whilr some people think foreign tourists should pay more, I agree the view of those who believe it should be equal for foreigners and aborigines. To begin with, foreign visitors travel to other countries in order to know about their cultures, traditions as well as their histories. Some individuals believe it should be more expensive for tourists to enter these places. With introduce higher costs, government might earn extra money and also spend it for developing of attractions, such as museums, historical sites. For instance, in Uzbekistan the entry cost of Registan square, which is situated in Samarkand is higher for tourists than inhabitants and authority expend money in order to renovation of this place. However, I would argue that it should be the same for both of them because of some reasons. Firstly, foreign travellers have numerous expenditure to trip other regions, for example for visa and ticket of either train's and plane's, also the charge of food, hotel and perhaps for presents. Secondly, since foreign visitors have a contribution to tourism of country, it would be better to debase costs. The more tourists travel the nation, the more popular it will be. Furthermore, it helps to remain state's standing on the global stage in terms of popularity. To sum up, it seems to me that it would be better to introduce similar prices for both foreign guests and local residents.
It is true that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
pay more attention
as well
as money to historical and cultural attractions.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Whilr
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
should pay more, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
the view of those who believe it should be equal for foreigners and aborigines. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
visitors travel to other countries in order to know about their cultures, traditions
as well
as their histories.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
individuals believe it should be more expensive for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
to enter these places. With introduce higher costs,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
might earn extra money and
also
The usual prepositions that follow “spend it” are either “on” or “in”. Did you mean “spend it on”?
spend it for
developing of attractions, such as museums, historical sites.
For instance
, in Uzbekistan the entry cost of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Registan
square, which
is situated
in Samarkand is higher for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
than inhabitants and authority expend money in order to renovation of this place.
However
, I would argue that it should be the same for both of them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reasons.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
Possible spelling mistake. ‘travellers’ is British English.
travellers
have numerous expenditure to trip other regions,
for example
for visa and ticket of either train's and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plane
's,
also
the charge of food, hotel and perhaps for presents.
Secondly
, since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
visitors have a contribution to tourism of country, it would be better to debase costs. The more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
travel the nation, the more popular it will be.
Furthermore
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to remain state's standing on the global stage in terms of popularity. To sum up, it seems to me that it would be better to introduce similar prices for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
guests and local residents.

IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
249 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?