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Task 2 Some people think that Olympic games are exciting event that brings other nations together. Others say Olympics are expensive and waste of money that would be better spent on other things. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

The past 50 years have seen a chromatic increase in Olympic Games that are bringing more benefits such as the nations become jointly and it helps to develop the tourism. But some people believe that games are dear as well as squander more money from the travelers in order to spend on other things. This essay obviously agreed with this opinion and all things will be evaluated. Firstly, Olympic Games are crucial part of our life and they help to become together and increase the tourism of course. However, that games be carried out once in a four years and millions of people come to see as well as they spend during the olympics. If that olympics become in some countries, that countries will be recognized to the world and it’s budget will increase. For instance, in 2014, it was Olympic Game in my country and then the country improved once more. But these games can affect negatively to some people or countries. Because, the guests who come to see the Olympics dare to spend much money and they may lose their time during the journey. Even some countries dare to purchase new products such as technics if there will be Olympics in that country and this leads to waste the finance. One particarly proper example of this is Slovakia. Taking everything into an account, Olympic games are getting popular and this helps to unite the people while it can demand much money and take time from visitors.
The past 50 years have
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seen
a chromatic increase in Olympic
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Games
that are bringing more benefits such as the nations become
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jointly and
it
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helps
to develop the tourism.
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But
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some
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people
believe that
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games
are dear
as well
as squander more money from the travelers in order to spend on other things. This essay
obviously
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agreed
with this opinion and all things will
be evaluated
.

Firstly
, Olympic
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Games
are crucial part of our
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life and
they
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help
to become together and increase the tourism
of course
.
However
, that
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games
be carried
out once in
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a four
years and millions of
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people
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come
to
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see
as well
as they spend during the
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olympics
. If that
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olympics
become in
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some
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countries
, that
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countries
will
be recognized
to the
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world and
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it’s
budget will increase.
For instance
, in 2014, it was Olympic Game in my
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country
and then the
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country
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improved
once more.

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But
these
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games
can affect
negatively
to
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some
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people
or
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countries
.
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Because
, the guests who
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come
to
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see
the Olympics dare to spend much
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money and
they may lose their time during the journey. Even
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some
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countries
dare to
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purchase
new products such as technics if there will be Olympics in that
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country
and this leads to waste the finance. One
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particarly
proper example of this is Slovakia.

Taking everything into an account, Olympic
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games
are getting popular and this
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helps
to unite the
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people
while it can demand much money and take time from visitors.
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IELTS essay Task 2 Some people think that Olympic games are exciting event that brings other nations together. Others say Olympics are expensive and waste of money that would be better spent on other things.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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