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For me if I have to pick a side I will chose to learn in traditional classes and this is because of some reasons One of them is that it makes me concentrate more when i see my teacher and colleagues in front of me I can easily ask any question I want at a v.1

For me if I have to pick a side I will chose to learn in traditional classes and this is because of some reasons One of them is that it makes me concentrate more when i see my teacher and colleagues in front of me I can easily ask any question I want at a v. 1
It is argued that the expansion of international companies coming with a rise of globalization brings people big opportunities. I completely agree with the said statement. This essay will discuss different perspectives and how the development provides everybody beneficial impacts, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The most immediate and helpful contribution brought from cross-national companies are job openings, in which most are high-level jobs needing high skilled and high-salary workers compared to local companies' ones. International companies usually carry with great financial support, enhanced technologies and well-designed management scheme that can benefit their works including locally hired employees. Not only can these job opportunities increase the employment rate of local nations, but also the average salary, technology development and management system improvement. For example, Alibaba currently has one of the most popular and advanced cloud-based e-commerce platform in China which is pioneered by the support of Yahoo! China, and some technical team members were also from Yahoo! China. Moreover, the products and services provided by global companies give local residents a lot of convenient and cost-effect consumption. Inventing a successful innovation usually needs a vast amount of money and well-developed infrastructure which often is lacking in many countries. For example, people can enjoy global brand products like Coca Cola, McDonalds, iPhone and Google easily and cheaply even in undeveloped and developing countries. In conclusion, It's totally agreed that the development of cross-national businesses and its accompanying globalization could provide people more job opportunities and varieties of product and service options, which make our lives easier and better!
It
is argued
that the expansion of international
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companies
coming with a rise of globalization brings
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people
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big
opportunities. I completely
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agree
with the said statement. This essay will discuss
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different
perspectives and how the development provides everybody beneficial impacts, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

The most immediate and helpful contribution brought from cross-national
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companies
are
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job
openings, in which most are high-level
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jobs
needing high skilled and high-salary workers compared to local
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companies
' ones. International
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companies
usually
carry with great financial support, enhanced technologies and well-designed management scheme that can benefit their works including
locally
hired employees. Not
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only
can these
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job
opportunities increase the employment rate of local nations,
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but
also
the average salary, technology development and management system improvement.
For example
, Alibaba
currently
has one of the most popular and advanced cloud-based e-commerce platform in China which
is pioneered
by the support of Yahoo! China, and
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some
technical team members were
also
from Yahoo! China.

Moreover
, the products and services provided by global
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companies
give local residents
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a lot of
convenient and cost-effect consumption. Inventing a successful innovation
usually
needs a vast amount of money and well-developed infrastructure which
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often
is lacking in
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many
countries.
For example
,
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people
can enjoy global brand products like Coca Cola,
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McDonalds
, iPhone and Google
easily
and
cheaply
even in undeveloped and
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developing countries
.

In conclusion
, It's
totally
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agreed
that the development of cross-national businesses and its accompanying globalization could provide
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people
more
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job
opportunities and varieties of product and service options, which
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make
our
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lives
easier and better!
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay For me if I have to pick a side I will chose to learn in traditional classes and this is because of some reasons One of them is that it makes me concentrate more when i see my teacher and colleagues in front of me I can easily ask any question I want at a v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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