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First time online shopping

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It was the year 2018 when I made my account on the Amazon app for online shopping. Then I saved my mother's credit card for the payment. After that, I started watching the products. I liked scrolling through new products because it was my first experience. Then I selected the trimmer, which was of good quality and at a reasonable price. Moreover, reviews were highly rated. By watching all these things, I ordered the trimmer and started waiting for the delivery. As this was my first order, they waived my delivery charges which made me joyful. By looking at my mobile phone, I always thought about the product and who would deliver it. Finally, after three days, a person called me and told me that your order had arrived please receive it. Without delay in time, I opened the box and used the trimmer. It was perfect when I used it. I was happy and felt proud of doing something new by buying online.
It was the year 2018 when I made my account on the Amazon app for online shopping. Then I saved my mother's credit card for the payment. After that, I
started
watching the products. I liked scrolling through new products
because
it was my
first
experience. Then I selected the trimmer, which was of
good
quality and at a reasonable price.

Moreover
, reviews were
highly
rated. By watching all these things, I ordered the trimmer and
started
waiting for the delivery. As this was my
first
order, they waived my delivery charges which made me joyful. By looking at my mobile phone, I always
thought
about the product and who would deliver it.
Finally
, after three days, a person called me and
told
me that your order had arrived
please
receive it.

Without delay in time, I opened the box and
used
the trimmer.

It was perfect when I
used
it. I was happy and felt proud of doing something new by buying online.
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IELTS essay First time online shopping

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
164 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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