Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Fee IncreaseThe board of trustees has proposed an eighty-dollar fee increase to help the university achieve gender equality in women’s sports and to fund sports clubs for both men and women on campus. At a meeting of the Student Council on Monday, the r v.1

Fee IncreaseThe board of trustees has proposed an eighty-dollar fee increase to help the university achieve gender equality in women’s sports and to fund sports clubs for both men and women on campus. At a meeting of the Student Council on Monday, the r v. 1
In recent times, pet related injuries and mortalities have sparked heated debates about whether it is healthy for children to be around pets. In this essay I shall argue that such dangers are overemphasised and that children receive substantive psychological benefits through having pets. To begin with, although exotic pets such as snakes, spiders have been known to occasionally hurt and even kill children, such incidents are so statistically rare as to be negligible. This is because the overwhelming majority of children have non-lethal cats, dogs, fish, rodents and rabbits for pets. For example The Child Safety Institute found that over 90% of children owned the aforementioned pets, and professed that they had never felt in the least bit endangered by them. Seen in this light, it is clearly unfounded to claim that pets present any physical danger to children. Secondly, pets can impact positively upon child psychology. This is because young pet owners frequently empathise with their pets and perform a diverse range of actions to maintain their well- being such as feeding, grooming. For instance, the Cambridge Developmental Psychology Unit found that children who had grown up with pets were 30% less likely to bully others and resolve conflicts through aggression. Consequently, it is undeniable that a child’s pro-sociality and mental health can be improved through exposure to pets. In conclusion, the cited evidence provides strong support for the view that children owning pets is a good thing. In the future, as more laws are introduced to ban the ownership of illegally acquired exotic pets, this viewpoint will no doubt surge in popularity.
In recent times, pet related injuries and
Possible spelling mistake found.
mortalities
have sparked heated debates about whether it is healthy for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to be around
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
. In this essay I shall argue that such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
are
Possible spelling mistake. 'overemphasised' is British English.
overemphasised
and that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
receive substantive psychological benefits through having pets.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, although exotic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
such as snakes, spiders have
been known
to
occasionally
hurt and even kill
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, such incidents are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
statistically
rare as to be negligible. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the overwhelming majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
have non-lethal cats, dogs, fish, rodents and rabbits for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
.
For example
The Child Safety Institute found that over 90% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
the aforementioned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
, and professed that they had never felt in the least bit endangered by them.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Seen
in this light, it is
clearly
unfounded to claim that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
present any physical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
to children.

Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
can impact
positively
upon child psychology. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
young pet owners
frequently
Possible spelling mistake. 'empathise' is British English.
empathise
with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
and perform a diverse range of actions to maintain their well- being such as feeding, grooming.
For instance
, the Cambridge Developmental Psychology Unit found that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
who had grown up with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
were 30% less likely to bully others and resolve conflicts through aggression.
Consequently
, it is undeniable that a child’s
Possible spelling mistake found.
pro-sociality
and mental health can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
through exposure to pets.

In conclusion
, the cited evidence provides strong support for the view that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
owning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
thing. In the future, as more laws
are introduced
to ban the ownership of
illegally
acquired exotic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
, this viewpoint will no doubt surge in popularity.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Fee IncreaseThe board of trustees has proposed an eighty-dollar fee increase to help the university achieve gender equality in women’s sports and to fund sports clubs for both men and women on campus. At a meeting of the Student Council on Monday, the r v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts