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fashion items are expensive and it's useless to spend a lot of money on being fashionable, in other hand, some people think fashion is an important part of our lives and it's ok if buying branding and new clothes and items cost too much money.

fashion items are expensive and it's useless to spend a lot of money on being fashionable, in other hand, some people think fashion is an important part of our lives and it's ok if buying branding and new clothes and items cost too much money. 968e3
there is an opinion that fashion items are expensive and it's useless to spend a lot of money on being fashionable, in other hand, some people think fashion is an important part of our lives and it's ok if buying branding and new clothes and items cost too much money. In my opinion it's true that wearing stylish clothes is important and we should look good if we want to live successfully in society but being fashionable and looking neat is different from spending thousands of dollars on a piece of cloth just because of the brand name. There are lots of ways that people can look in style and be neat and handsome or beautiful. Fortunately, in 20 decade of new century, wearing simple and comfy clothes is trend which is really helpful for earth, in hundred years humans polluting our planet by produce cloth more than their need and mostly nonfunctional and made with plastic. So, I am in favor of using beautiful, simple, comfortable items with reasonable prices rather than unnecessary, decorative, expensive items which are wearable in a short time and go out of style after a while. Some people spend too much money on clothes not just to wear something suitable and useful but just to show off. I mean there are a lot of important issues out there in the world which should be considered and paid for rather than carrying a thousand box famous handbags. In conclusion, I hope the new generation understands the concept of wearing cloth and be more aware about pollution made by the fashion industry.
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there
is an opinion that fashion
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items
are expensive and it's useless to spend
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a lot of
money on being fashionable, in other hand,
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some
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people
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think
fashion is an
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important
part of our
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lives
and it's ok if buying branding and new
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clothes
and
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items
cost too much money.

In my opinion it's true that wearing stylish
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clothes
is
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important and
we should look
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good
if we want to
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live
successfully
in society
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but
being fashionable and looking neat is
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different
from spending thousands of dollars on a piece of
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cloth
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just
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because
of the brand name. There are lots of ways that
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people
can look in style and be neat and handsome or
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beautiful
.

Fortunately
, in 20 decade of new century, wearing simple and comfy
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clothes
is trend which is
really
helpful for earth, in
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hundred
years humans polluting our planet by produce
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cloth
more than their need and
mostly
nonfunctional and made with plastic.

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So
, I am in favor of using
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beautiful
, simple, comfortable
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items
with reasonable prices
rather
than unnecessary, decorative, expensive
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items
which are wearable in a short time and go out of style after a while.

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Some
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people
spend too much money on
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clothes
not
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just
to wear something suitable and useful
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but
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just
to
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show
off. I mean there are
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a lot of
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important
issues out there in the world which should
be considered
and paid for
rather
than carrying a thousand box
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famous
handbags.

In conclusion
, I hope the new generation understands the concept of wearing
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cloth
and be more aware about pollution made by the fashion industry.
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IELTS essay fashion items are expensive and it's useless to spend a lot of money on being fashionable, in other hand, some people think fashion is an important part of our lives and it's ok if buying branding and new clothes and items cost too much money.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
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