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It is true that in the past, families tended to be larger than they nowadays because people had more children. From my standpoint, there were both benefits and drawbacks about this issue. In the first place, there were some disadvantages of being a part of a large family. To begin with, household finances were the most enormous problem they had to face up with. In case that some families were rich, that was not a big deal, but with a poor family, it was a really serious problem. Because there were many members live in the house, the amount of money that the parents had to pay for living increased significantly. Next, having many children led to the fact that the homemaker could be really busy, because she had to do all the housework as well as looked after the kids. In addition, the house also did not have enough rooms for all the children, so they had to share rooms together. For this reason, it meant that the kids didn’t have their own space for personal interest. An inevitable thing that would turn up regularly between each member was the arguments. Therefore, the family would have a negative atmosphere. Finally, the last disadvantage of being a part of a large family was the children were not loved equally.
It is true that in the past,
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tended to be larger than they nowadays
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because
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people
had more
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children
. From my standpoint, there were both benefits and drawbacks about this issue.

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first
place, there were
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some
disadvantages of being a part of a large
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family
. To
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begin
with, household finances were the most enormous problem they had to face up with. In case that
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some
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families
were rich, that was not a
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big
deal,
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but
with a poor
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family
, it was a
really
serious problem.
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Because
there were
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many
members
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live
in the
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house
, the amount of money that the parents had to pay for living increased
significantly
.
Next
, having
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many
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children
led to the fact that the homemaker could be
really
busy,
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because
she had to do all the housework
as well
as looked after the kids.
In addition
, the
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house
also
did not have
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enough
rooms for all the
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children
,
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so
they had to share rooms together.
For this reason
, it meant that the kids didn’t have their
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own
space for personal interest. An inevitable thing that would turn up
regularly
between each member was the arguments.
Therefore
, the
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family
would have a
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negative
atmosphere.
Finally
, the last disadvantage of being a part of a large
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family
was the
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children
were not
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loved
equally
.
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IELTS essay family that have many children

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
219 words
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