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Family is the first group that anyone joins it. children are trying to atittude like their family

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Family is the first group that anyone joins it. children are trying to atittude like their family specialy their parrents in early ages. consequently, some people believes it is parents responsibility to train usefull members for society. In contrast, other believes that this is schools duty. This essay is going to argue abord both of these views. According to scientist researches, the best years for learning is betwwen 3-6. learning trend is these ages is about 40% more then other ages, children is spending these golden years in home. so, It is essential for parrents spend some times for their children learn them Some necessary skills in some games to it not be boring for a kid. On the contrary children spend about one third of their day time in school and school role in pupils future is inevitable. Further moreschool is place which children can facet their same ages and kids can learn many things from each other too. The main privilage of school to familey is they using some experienced teachers which training students every year. They know how to react to children atitude for instance when a pupil does something wrong, They can punish the childeren in which do not affect him/her mental health way. In conclude both parrents and school are responsible for children future and cooperation between these two can lead to an useful part for society is be trained.
Family is the
first
group that anyone
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joins
it.
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children
are trying to
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atittude
like their family

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specialy
their
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parrents
in early
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ages
.
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consequently
,
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some
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people
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believes
it is parents responsibility to train
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usefull
members for society.
In contrast
, other believes that this is
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schools
duty. This essay is going to argue
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abord
both of these views.

According to scientist researches, the best years for learning is
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betwwen
3-6.
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learning
trend is these
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ages
is about 40% more
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then
other
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ages
,
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children
is spending these golden years in home.
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so
, It is essential for
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parrents
spend
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some
times for their
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children
learn them
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Some
necessary
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skills
in
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some
games to it not be boring for a kid.

On the contrary
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children
spend about one third of their day time in
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school
and
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school
role in pupils future is inevitable.
Further
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moreschool
is place which
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children
can facet their

same
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ages
and kids can learn
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many
things from each other too. The main
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privilage
of
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school
to
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familey
is they using
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some
experienced teachers which training students every year. They know how to react to
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children
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atitude
for instance
when a pupil does something
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wrong
, They can punish the
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childeren
in which do not affect him/her mental health way.

In conclude both
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parrents
and
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school
are responsible for
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children
future and cooperation between these two can lead to
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an
useful part for society is
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be
trained.
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IELTS essay Family is the first group that anyone joins it. children are trying to atittude like their family

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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