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Children should always follow their parents' advice. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Children should always follow their parents' advice. with this statement? rLjjp
Parents are necessary for children's life, so I do agree with the statement. Parents are talkative but what they talk about is true. First, they are best friends with their children. When kids are born, they are raised by their parents. Parents teach them how to walk, read and think and encourage them to go to school. For example, when kids are in trouble, they talk with their closest friends first, and then their parents or they can tell their parents to punish the ones that are in trouble. Parents can always teach children how to be good in life, but teachers can't always do it. They can also teach them about dangers, from their homes to the wide world. For example, children must stay away from electricity because they have a high risk of killing them. Parents can also block windows so their young children won't fall out and get killed. But the love from their teachers is different. Parents get paid for school for their kids to see their teacher. Sometimes, they can punish them for bad actions, but it is only one part of children's love. For example, teachers only teach them for their future job, but not their life skills. When they grow up, they rely less on their parents and spend more time with their friends. They can realize what is wrong or right without their parents' help. They can also live by themselves without their parents and also choose their careers. In conclusion, children should always listen to their parents because they shape their future, but not when they live independently.
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. When kids
are born
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are raised
by their
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them how to walk, read and
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and encourage them to go to school.
For example
, when kids are in trouble, they talk with their closest friends
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to punish the ones that are in trouble.

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children
how to be
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good
in life,
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them about
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, from their homes to the wide world.
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stay away from electricity
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their young
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won't fall out and
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paid for school for their kids to
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one part of children's
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them for their future job,
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not their life
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skills
.

When they grow up, they rely less on their
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parents
and spend more time with their friends. They can realize what is
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wrong
or right without their parents'
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help
. They can
also
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live
by themselves without their
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and
also
choose their careers.

In conclusion
,
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children
should always listen to their
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parents
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because
they shape their future,
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not when they
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live
independently
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IELTS essay Children should always follow their parents' advice. with this statement?

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