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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree to disagree with this statement?

It is thought by some that parents who choose private institutions for their education should not have to pay taxes for the education system. Although these benefits many individuals, in a broad sense, it would be harmful to the society and therefore I disagree with this view. There are several reasons why people hold this view. Firstly, it would create a sense of unfairness in the society. Despite parents sending their children to private schools, they are required to pay the same as those who send their offsprings to state school. Additionally, taxes paid by the money could be spent elsewhere. For example, it could be devoted to the child’s welfare or private institutions which they study in. However, there are many problems related to this. Initially, this would mean degradation of the quality of government schools as there would be a lack of funding, and thus not improvement in facilities. Furthermore, few state schools could may have to close due to funding problem. Therefore, children of poor people are taken away the opportunity of study. As well as this, governments may to have to employ people to calculate taxes of different people according to how they enjoy state facilities. All of these can be avoided if tax money remains the same for everyone. In conclusion, reducing the tax for people who not send their children to public schools may be beneficial on individual level, but as society as a whole, it would have detrimental effects so the tax for all people should be the same.
It is
thought
by
some
that parents who choose private institutions for their education should not
have to
pay
taxes
for the education system. Although these benefits
many
individuals, in a broad sense, it would be harmful to the society and
therefore
I disagree with this view.

There are several reasons why
people
hold this view.
Firstly
, it would create a sense of unfairness in the society. Despite parents sending their children to private
schools
, they
are required
to pay the same as those who
send
their
offsprings
to state
school
.
Additionally
,
taxes
paid by the money could
be spent
elsewhere.
For example
, it could
be devoted
to the child’s welfare or private institutions which they study in.

However
, there are
many
problems related to this.
Initially
, this would mean degradation of the quality of
government
schools
as there would be a lack of funding, and
thus
not improvement in facilities.
Furthermore
, few state
schools
could may
have to
close due to funding problem.
Therefore
, children of poor
people
are taken
away the opportunity of study.
As well
as this,
governments
may to
have to
employ
people
to calculate
taxes
of
different
people
according to how they enjoy state facilities. All of these can
be avoided
if
tax
money remains the same for everyone.

In conclusion
, reducing the
tax
for
people
who not
send
their children to public
schools
may be beneficial on individual level,
but
as society as a whole, it would have detrimental effects
so
the
tax
for all
people
should be the same.
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IELTS essay Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
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