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Extreme sports should be banned

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For example, today the most people interested in fearful physical activities like, scuba diving, but, some have dismay(about height or water). After the first attempt they get rid of their negative emotions and they can take recreation by it. Thus, we should try to believe in ourselves in any situation and mortify our funk Secondly, in human beings' life, for the aim of being famous it can be seen that most people select this type of sport even it would be costly, so some countries want to earn funds through extreme sports. In this way they develop the field of tourism. In fact, the country of Dubai has a lot of opportunities about extreme sports and through it, the majority of individuals visit in there. According to this reasons, we must approve this kind of sports as it would be beneficial for us In conclusion, it is true that adventure sport can be dangerous and unreliable. However it can be beneficial for our popularity and the budget of the nation

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