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Extreme sports is over the controversy that the government should prohibit them, meanwhile some people against this idea and contend they must be allowed to do the thing they interested in.

Extreme sports is over the controversy that the government should prohibit them, meanwhile some people against this idea and contend they must be allowed to do the thing they interested in. 2lrjj
Extreme sports is over the controversy that the government should prohibit them, meanwhile some people against this idea and contend they must be allowed to do the thing they interested in. On the one hand, the risk sports patently has hazards. To be specific, it contains a lot of challenges and the professional skills are the prerequites for the particular situation. Nowadays, internet has been spread universally, and the videos of these dangerous sports has been common, however without the comprehen, especially the novices, they may be easy to injure themselve and the fatal acidents are also inevitable. besides, the major of teenager are likely to be show off themselves and tend to imitate doing the risk things as they commonly see on youtube and then we cannot image the consequence that will happen. Due to the numerous of these things, the government patently consider the hazard can have and limited a number of sports. On the other hand, although we cannot deny the risks bringing, people still have the right pf free to do any sport. People may find it as an opportunity for their talents and passion to be turned out and there will be several professional people in the future. Moreover, back to date, the government should know that if the policy of banning some sports, how can we have the number of record as mountaineering and racing car and there has noone climb up to the top of everest. in conclusion, banning dangerous sport seem to be beneficial albeit i contend that the advanatge of allowance to do any sport will be met more agreement.
Extreme
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is over the controversy that the
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government
should prohibit them, meanwhile
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some
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people
against this
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idea
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allowed
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risk
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sports
patently
has hazards. To be specific, it contains
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a lot of
challenges and the professional
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skills
are the
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prerequites
for the particular situation. Nowadays, internet has
been spread
universally
, and the videos of these
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dangerous
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sports
has been common,
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especially
the novices, they may be easy to injure
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are likely to be
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show
off themselves and tend to imitate doing the
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risk
things as they
commonly
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then we cannot image the consequence that will happen. Due to
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the numerous of
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patently
consider the hazard can have and limited a number of sports.

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, although we cannot deny the
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risks
bringing,
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people
still
have the right pf free to do any
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sport
.
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People
may find it as an opportunity for their talents and passion to
be turned
out and there will be several professional
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people
in the future.
Moreover
, back to date, the
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government
should know that if the policy of banning
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some
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sports
, how can we have the number of record as mountaineering and racing car and there has
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noone
climb up to the top

of
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everest
.

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in
conclusion, banning
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dangerous
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sport
seem to be beneficial albeit
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contend that the
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advanatge
of allowance to do any
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sport
will
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more agreement.
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IELTS essay Extreme sports is over the controversy that the government should prohibit them, meanwhile some people against this idea and contend they must be allowed to do the thing they interested in.

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4 paragraphs
269 words
5.5
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