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Express how the examples from the Professor's lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication. v.1

Express how the examples from the Professor's lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication. v. 1
It is said by many people that extinction of many species of plants and animals is the main environmental problem we are facing right now. While others say that, apart from these we have more urgent environmental problems to look after. In my opinion, both the problems are equally devastating and they both are important. They both need an equal amount of energy and resources to preserve them. We have already lost so many exotic animals and plants from our surrounding. And now we should be concentrating on preserving these resources which are left. As most of the plants that have been extinct were used for medical purposes and now they can't be used. And many animals have also been lost because we humans hunted them down, for their skin, teeth and horns. Due to this worldwide population of animals is also getting low. Although there are other important environmental problems too, like global warming and oil spilling on the ocean. Global warming has been in the news for a decade now and because of this, the icebergs of the north pole are getting depleted because of which the weather conditions are changing too much. Another problem which we should look into is the oil spilling on the ocean. Since oil floats over the water, the oxygen that fish needs are not getting. They are coming to the surface of water and then they are getting covered in oil. This makes them harder to breathe under water and eventually they are dying. In my opinion, the problems are both equally important and they should be addressed quickly in order to save the environment. In conclusion, extinction of plant and animals is happening right now and we should do help these creatures by making them feel safe on this planet. Whereas, other problems are equally important as they are related to survival of human life and other organisms.
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is said
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many
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people
that extinction of
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many
species of
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plants
and
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animals
is the main environmental
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problem
we are facing right
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now
. While others say that, apart from these we have more urgent environmental
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problems
to look after. In my opinion, both the
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problems
are
equally
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devastating and
they both are
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important
. They both need an equal amount of energy and resources to preserve them.

We have already lost
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so
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many
exotic
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animals
and
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plants
from our surrounding. And
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now
we should be concentrating on preserving these resources which are
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left
. As most of the
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plants
that have been extinct were
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used
for medical purposes and
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now
they can't be
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used
. And
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many
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animals
have
also
been lost
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because
we humans hunted them down, for their skin, teeth and horns. Due to this worldwide population of
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animals
is
also
getting low.

Although there are
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other
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important
environmental
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problems
too, like global warming and
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oil
spilling on the ocean. Global warming has been in the news for a decade
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now
and
because of this
, the icebergs of the
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north pole
are getting depleted
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because
of which the weather conditions are changing too much. Another
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problem
which we should look into is the
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oil
spilling on the ocean. Since
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oil
floats over the water, the oxygen that fish needs are not getting. They are coming to the surface of
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water and
then they are getting covered in
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oil
. This
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makes
them harder to breathe under water and
eventually
they are dying.

In my opinion, the
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problems
are both
equally
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important and
they should
be addressed
quickly
in order to save the environment.

In conclusion
, extinction of
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plant
and
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animals
is happening right
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now and
we should do
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help
these creatures by making them feel safe on this planet. Whereas,
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other
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problems
are
equally
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important
as they
are related
to survival of human life and
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other
organisms.
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IELTS essay Express how the examples from the Professor's lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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