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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Explain how the examples from the professor’s lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Explain how the examples from the professor’s lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
Nobody can deny that parental influence is important for children, at least in cases where children live with their parents, foster parents or guardians. However, it is by no means clear that children should spend time exclusively with their family, as we will see. On the one hand, it may appear advisable for parents to act as role models and to establish ground rules for behaviour by spending as much moment as absorb conventions and codes of conduct which they can then follow themselves hopefully leading to an absence of problems such as bullying, truancy and delinquency later on. Furthermore, being with the family should reduce the risk of children falling victim to crimes such as abduction or coming under the influence of negative peer pressure. On the other hand, we have to ask whether this is a practical proposition. In a society, where many families are dual- income, or where one parent's role as breadwinner means he/she is away from the family for long periods, it is inevitable that children cannot spend all of their hours the family. Child-minding and after school childcare are often used in these cases, and if managed properly, these can be perfectly viable alternatives. Equally, it seems that children can in some cases learn a considerable amount from their peers in addition to adults, and allowing them to play without direct supervision may be a benefit. To conclude, it appears that, while family space is essential for bonding and absorbing patterns of behaviour, there are definite advantages when children are outside the family too. This is provided that they are in a safe, well-behaved environment with peers who are themselves reasonably well brought-up.
Nobody can deny that parental influence is
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important
for
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children
, at least in cases where
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children
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live
with their parents, foster parents or guardians.
However
, it is by no means
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clear
that
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children
should spend time exclusively with their
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family
, as we will
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see
.

On the one hand, it may appear advisable for parents to act as role models and to establish ground
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rules
for
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behaviour
by spending as much moment as absorb conventions and codes of conduct which they can then follow themselves
hopefully
leading to an absence of problems such as bullying, truancy and delinquency later on.
Furthermore
, being with the
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family
should
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reduce
the
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risk
of
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children
falling victim to crimes such as abduction or coming under the influence of
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negative
peer pressure.

On the other hand
, we
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have to
ask whether this is a practical proposition. In a society, where
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many
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families
are dual- income, or where one parent's role as breadwinner means he/she is away from the
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family
for long periods, it is inevitable that
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children
cannot spend all of their hours the
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family
. Child-minding and after school childcare are
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often
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used
in these cases, and if managed
properly
, these can be
perfectly
viable alternatives.
Equally
, it seems that
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children
can in
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some
cases learn a considerable amount from their peers
in addition
to adults, and allowing them to play without direct supervision may be a benefit.

To conclude
, it appears that, while
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family
space is essential for bonding and absorbing patterns of
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behaviour
, there are
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definite
advantages when
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children
are outside the
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family
too. This
is provided
that they are in a safe, well-behaved environment with peers who are themselves
reasonably
well brought-up.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Explain how the examples from the professor’s lecture illustrate the relationship between verbal and nonverbal communication. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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