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Explain why you would like the job.give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ.Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia

Explain why you would like the job. give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia KrAL
I am writing this about you live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Yes i want to the job because i am a working in a child care activities and social works. I personally heart touching in a child and girls crime. So i will better future for kids to work in a Society. My name is andrew. i belong to sydney. i am a working in a child and girls save Society. my part time job is work to social activities. I work for child and girls bright future. my society are registerd. My id cardand society certificate no b1245 are mention in this. so i am best for this job. Well i first a to take care a your six year old child. because your child is my responsibilities and my free time after the work i looking market and museum etc. i promise to you are give me job oppertunity i do hundred percent of me. i have no complaint of my work. So they are my ideas. i am thankful to you. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerly, martin
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want to the
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job
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because
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i
am a working in a
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child
care activities and social works. I
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personally heart
touching in a
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child
and girls crime.
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So
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i
will better future for kids to
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work
in a
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Society
. My name is
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andrew
.
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i
belong to
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sydney
.
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i
am a working in a
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child
and girls save
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Society
.
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my
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part time
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job
is
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work
to social activities. I
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work
for
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child
and girls bright future.
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my
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society
are
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registerd
. My id
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cardand
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society
certificate no b1245 are mention in this.
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so
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i
am best for this
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job
. Well i
first
a to take care a your six year
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old
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child
.
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because
your
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child
is my responsibilities and my free time after the
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work
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i
looking market and museum etc.
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i
promise to you are give me
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job
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oppertunity
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i
do
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hundred
percent of me.
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i
have no complaint of my
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work
.
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So
they are my
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ideas
.
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i
am thankful to you. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours
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sincerly
,
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martin

IELTS essay Explain why you would like the job. give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
193 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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