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Experimentation on animals

Experimentation on animals B3Np
The use of animals for scientific or medical research purposes have been debated for quite a while now. More than 1 million animals are being used for these purposes every year and there are lots of different opinions about whether we should continue experimenting on animals. I personally believe that any experiment done on an animal for scientific and medical purposes are unethical and that they should be banned. First of all, humans and animals don’t always react the same way to a drug. There are many differences between animals and humans. To do a scientific or medical experiment on an animal, only for it to be a failure would be a waste of unnecessary life, which unfortunately happens quite often. A lot of the time, the drugs tested on animals aren’t put up on the market even though they work on animals because of the fact that humans don’t always react the same to it. This is a waste of precious life and also a waste of money too. Also, I believe that there is no need to cause pain and torture animals when due to technological developing there are computer systems, models, human tissues and more focused clinical studies that can show us what happens to our bodies that will help these experiments without using any animals. In addition to this, animals feel the same pain and fear just as we do, they are living beings and their lives matter. Experimenting and injecting things in them should be a violation of their rights, which would be the case if humans were the ones being experimented on. Any benefits that humans would gain through these tests should be irrelevant when it comes to violating animals rights. While it’s true that to stop experiments done on animals could also be unethical due to the fact that it would dramatically affect the discoveries of new knowledge and the flow of treatments for those with health conditions who desperately need them, i also think that we can find better solutions to these problems. In conclusion, i think that animals should have the same protection and consideration as humans and they should not have to go through these painful experiments and risk dying. We should all be more aware and conscious of this situation and try to make others more aware of this as well. Let’s protect animals from any pain that would be caused by these researches.
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for scientific or medical research purposes have
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for quite a while
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now
. More than 1 million
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are being
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used
for these purposes every year and there are lots of
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different
opinions about whether we should continue experimenting on
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animals
. I
personally
believe that any
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experiment
done on an
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animal
for scientific and medical purposes are unethical and that they should
be banned
.

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,
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humans
and
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animals
don’t always react the same way to a drug. There are
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many
differences between
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animals
and
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humans
. To do a scientific or medical
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experiment
on an
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animal
,
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only
for it to be a failure would be a waste of unnecessary life, which unfortunately happens quite
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often
.
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the time, the drugs
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tested
on
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animals
aren’t put up on the market
even though
they work on
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animals
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because of the fact that
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humans
don’t always react the same to it. This is a waste of precious life and
also
a waste of money too.

Also
, I believe that there is no need to cause pain and torture
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animals
when due to technological developing there are computer systems, models,
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human
tissues and more focused clinical studies that can
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show
us what happens to our bodies that will
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help
these
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experiments
without using any animals.

In addition
to this,
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animals
feel the same pain and fear
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just
as we do, they are living beings and their
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lives
matter. Experimenting and injecting things in them should be a violation of their rights, which would be the case if
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humans
were the ones
being experimented
on. Any benefits that
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humans
would gain through these
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tests
should be irrelevant when it
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comes
to violating
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animals
rights.

While it’s true that to
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stop
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experiments
done on
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animals
could
also
be unethical due to the fact that it would
dramatically
affect the discoveries of new knowledge and the flow of treatments for those with health conditions who
desperately
need them,
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i
also
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think
that we can find better solutions to these problems.

In conclusion
,
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i
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think
that
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animals
should have the same protection and consideration as
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humans and
they should not
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have to
go through these painful
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experiments
and
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risk
dying. We should all be more aware and conscious of this situation and try to
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make
others more aware of this
as well
.
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Let
’s protect
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animals
from any pain that would
be caused
by these researches.
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IELTS essay Experimentation on animals

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
405 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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