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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. M5bQ
The growing advent of Globalisation and foreign industrilisation has created a perspective in people’s mind that it brings negative effects to the natural environment. I dissent from this point of view as there are various benefits that countries reap because of Globalisation. This essay will cover pragmatic reasons about Globalisation and why it is important for people. On one hand when every country needs resources to flourish, it is important to cpnsider that not every country is resourceful. Some countries have an excess of some resources and deficit of others. Hence all the countries rely on each other for either natural produce or manufactured goods. For example, Oil producing countries in the Middle East has an excess of oil but these countries have a lack of skilled labour. Hence in order to develop and flourish as a country they offer jobs and residency to people from nations that has highest number of skilled people such as Asia, America and Germany. Similarly, Globalisation and industrial revolution has promoted Tourism in various countries and they rely heavily from the funds generated from tourism industry. People travelling from other parts of the world for business purposes get exposed to the cultural change of other countries and hence they become more adaptable and empathetic towards newer religions and cultures. For instance, A siginificant portion of GDP of Countries like Switzerland, Thailand, Malaysia come from tourism industry. These countries have the most beautiful landscapes and rely heavily on tourism rather than other business area. Hence it is concluded that Globalisation and industrial revolution has brought countries and people together by making them flourished and generated a new sense of living and acceptability among people with different cultural and religious backgrounds which in turn has increased tourism in certain countries
The growing advent of
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Globalisation
and foreign
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industrilisation
has created a perspective in
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people’s
mind that it brings
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negative
effects to the natural environment. I dissent from this point of view as there are various benefits that
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countries
reap
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because
of
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Globalisation
. This essay will cover pragmatic reasons about
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Globalisation
and why it is
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important
for
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people
.

On one hand when every
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country
needs resources to flourish, it is
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important
to
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cpnsider
that not every
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country
is resourceful.
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Some
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countries
have an excess of
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some
resources and deficit of others.
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Hence
all the
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countries
rely on each
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other
for either natural produce or manufactured
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goods
.
For example
, Oil producing
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countries
in the Middle East has an excess of oil
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but
these
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countries
have a lack of skilled
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labour
.
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Hence
in order to develop and flourish as a
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country
they offer jobs and residency to
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people
from nations that has
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highest
number of skilled
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people
such as Asia, America and Germany.

Similarly
,
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Globalisation
and industrial revolution has promoted
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Tourism
in various
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countries and
they
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rely
heavily
from the funds generated from
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tourism
industry.
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People
travelling from
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other
parts of the world for business purposes
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get
exposed to the cultural
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change
of
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other
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countries
and
hence
they become more adaptable and empathetic towards newer religions and cultures.
For instance
, A
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siginificant
portion of GDP of
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Countries
like Switzerland, Thailand, Malaysia
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come
from
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tourism
industry. These
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countries
have the most
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beautiful
landscapes and rely
heavily
on
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tourism
rather
than
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other
business area.

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Hence
it
is concluded
that
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Globalisation
and industrial revolution has brought
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countries
and
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people
together by making them flourished and generated a new sense of living and acceptability among
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people
with
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different
cultural and religious backgrounds which in turn has increased
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tourism
in certain
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countries
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IELTS essay Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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