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Expenditure of consumer goods

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British spent more money than French, on books, cars and cameras. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras. In terms of cars, UK spent almost 50000 PS more than France (450000, 400000 PS respectively). Meanwhile British spent almost 100000 PS more than French on books(400000, 300000 respectively). whereas UK spent twice amount of money than France, on cameras. Apart from other consumer goods, French recorded it's domination than British on computers and perfume. In terms of computers, French spent almost 25000 PS, more than British (3750000, 350000 respectively). whereas, almost 50000 PS spent by French more than British, on perfume.

British You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 more money than French, on books, cars and cameras. Furthermore
, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras. In terms of cars, UK You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withessentiallyaroundpracticallyroughlyapproximatelymost
almost
 50000 PS more than France (450000, 400000 PS respectively
). Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Meanwhile,
Meanwhile
 British You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withessentiallyaroundpracticallyroughlyapproximatelymost
almost
 100000 PS more than French on books(400000, 300000 respectively
). This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterWhereas
whereas
 UK You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 twice amount of money than France, on cameras. Apart from other consumer This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
, French recorded Did you mean "its" (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (=it is)?its
it's
 domination than British on computers and perfume. In terms of computers, French You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withessentiallyaroundpracticallyroughlyapproximatelymost
almost
 25000 PS, more than British (3750000, 350000 respectively
). This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterWhereas
whereas
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withessentiallyaroundpracticallyroughlyapproximatelymost
almost
 50000 PS You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwastedfinisheduseddeadlost
spent
 by French more than British, on perfume. 