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Everyone seeks happiness because of the fundamental need that it brings toward our life. There are some outward conditions that make for happiness.

Everyone seeks happiness because of the fundamental need that it brings toward our life. There are some outward conditions that make for happiness. bOmRQ

Everyone seeks happiness because of the fundamental need that it brings toward our life. There are some outward conditions that make for happiness. First of all, it is good health. Because if you do not have it, you can't experience happiness. Furthermore, an unemployed man is rarely a happy man. Most lazy people with nothing occupy their minds and their time. Workers are generally cheerful. Because a man who has a congenial occupation finds great happiness in his work. In addition, we should have hobbies to fill our leisure hours. For example, in our free time, we can listen to music, play video games, play sports, read interesting books and so on. Last but not least, living a happy life does not have particular tips or methods, it depends on what we do and how we feel after that.

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 not least, living a happy life does not have particular tips or methods, it depends on what we do and how we feel after that. 