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Every person is essential to the development of a country. Talk about what you think is your role in the development of your country. Use specific reasons and examples in your explanation

Government play most important role stops against human trafficking, government how to stop, which step they should take, how to protect their citizen. If we talk about identification, the documents on how to help stop human trafficking, we need to adopt measures to reduces vulnerability by ensuring that they have legal documents like birth certificate, citizenship prof they are this county person, and marriage certificate which government issue for all persons in their country. These documents are very useful for every citizen because we can find victims and we can analyze the system of human trafficking. If they don’t have these types of documents we cannot find where are the victims and, where he /she came from, how they become victim, because if they have these kinds of documents thus, we can find easily information and take action about it. Each and every government should launch the identification of their home country, we can recognize this person of this country citizen. One more thing, the government has to take every six months or one-year data collection of their village, cities, country. If they take data so they easily find who is missing? This data collection operates centrally so local, regional, national, and country-level find, who is become a victim so governments put their data centrally. After six months and years, the country has to analyze how many people are missing. If they analyze so they get information about it. And the government arranges regular inspections and creates unite teams so they can go and check there see what happens there. For example, industry, domestic work, agriculture, or construction. The government must create strict rules and regulations so everyone has to follow their rule and regulation. If someone breaks the rules government should give them a penalty. Municipalities also play a very important role in human trafficking, and they actively looking for and identifying the signs because their staff receives training from the police on how to handle and how to deal with the human trafficking problem and there are works on actives detections of human trafficking, which they can an operate. Some other municipalities decided themselves how they wish to fulfill their role in tackling human trafficking. Such as, so they can make rules and regulations and also make policy that helps combat human trafficking. They can also provide better shelter and care for victims of human trafficking within the municipality. They need to raise awareness that human trafficking is a crime and transfer people to shop for it.
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against
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trafficking,
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how to
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stop
, which step they should take, how to protect their citizen. If we talk about identification, the
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documents
on how to
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help
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stop
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human
trafficking, we need to adopt measures to
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reduces
vulnerability by ensuring that they have legal
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documents
like birth certificate, citizenship prof they are this county person, and marriage certificate which
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government
issue for all persons in their
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country
. These
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documents
are
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very
useful for every citizen
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we can
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find
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victims
and we can analyze the system of
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human
trafficking. If they don’t have these types of
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documents
we cannot
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find
where are the
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and, where he /she came from, how they become
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,
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if they have these kinds of
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find
easily
information and take action about it.

Each and every
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government
should launch the identification of their home
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country
, we can recognize this person of this
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country
citizen. One more thing, the
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government
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has to
take every six months or one-year
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data
collection of their village, cities,
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country
. If they take
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data
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so
they
easily
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find
who is missing? This
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collection operates
centrally
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so
local, regional, national, and country-level
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find
, who
is become
a
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victim
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so
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governments
put their
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centrally
. After six months and years, the
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country
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has to
analyze how
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many
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people
are missing. If they analyze
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so
they
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information about it. And the
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government
arranges regular inspections and creates unite teams
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so
they can go and
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there
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what happens there.
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, industry, domestic work, agriculture, or construction.

The
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and regulations
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so
everyone
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follow their
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rule
and regulation. If someone breaks the
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government
should give them a penalty. Municipalities
also
play a
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very
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important
role in
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human
trafficking, and they
actively
looking for and identifying the signs
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because
their staff receives training from the police on how to handle and how to deal with the
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trafficking problem and there are works on actives detections of
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trafficking, which they can an operate.

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Some
other municipalities decided themselves how they wish to fulfill their role in tackling
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human
trafficking. Such as,
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so
they can
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make
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rules
and regulations and
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make
policy that
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helps
combat
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human
trafficking. They can
also
provide better shelter and care for
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victims
of
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human
trafficking within the municipality. They need to raise awareness that
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human
trafficking is a crime and transfer
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people
to shop for it.
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IELTS essay Every person is essential to the development of a country. Talk about what you think is your role in the development of your country. Use specific reasons and examples in your explanation

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
419 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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