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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. 7aaDy
Health is fundamental right of every human being. Some people argue that every nation should provide free healthcare service. I am agree with this point. By investing in public health, The government can ensure that the most people of society have access to healthcare services. Every country have some numbers of poor people, who can not afford such services. In regarding, free healthcare system is essential to cater their healthcare needs. If government plan to run hospital with free healthcare services and information, everyone will be able to live healthy life. Since health is wealth, investing in public healthcare is wise decision for any country. Also by providing free healthcare, the country can prevent epidemics from spreading. Of course, the government may not be able to provide advanced medical treatments for free. Such treatments are highly expensive, but the government can fund them so that some of the treatments can be accessible. On the other side, for some countries fund raising can be burden for public. In such case, poorest people can get free treatments and there is no harm in charging nominal fees from rest of the population. Also, lots of expensive medical interventions can be avoided if diseases is diagnosed and treated in the initial stages. For instance, in initial stages diabetes is not expensive to treat and basic medication is sufficient, however if is not diagnosed and treated then it can lead to complications such as renal failure, cardiac stroke which requires expensive surgeries. To conclude, investing in public health by offering free services is important for each country. For expensive treatments, government should try to prevent such diseases in initial stages by providing basic healthcare treatment.
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Some
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people
argue that every nation should provide
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free
healthcare
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service
. I am
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agree
with this point. By investing in
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public
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health
, The
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government
can ensure that the most
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people
of society have access to healthcare services.

Every
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country
have
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some
numbers of poor
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people
, who can not afford such
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services
. In regarding,
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free
healthcare system is essential to cater their healthcare needs. If
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government
plan to run hospital with
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free
healthcare
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services
and information, everyone will be able to
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live
healthy life. Since
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health
is wealth, investing in
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public
healthcare is wise decision for any
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country
.
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by providing
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free
healthcare, the
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country
can
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prevent
epidemics from spreading.

Of course
, the
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government
may not be able to provide advanced medical
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treatments
for
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free
. Such
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treatments
are
highly
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expensive
,
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but
the
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government
can fund them
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so
that
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some of the
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treatments
can be accessible. On the other side, for
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some
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countries
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fund raising
can be burden for
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public
. In such case,
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poorest
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people
can
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get
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free
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treatments
and there is no harm in charging nominal fees from rest of the population.
Also
, lots of
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expensive
medical interventions can
be avoided
if diseases
is diagnosed
and treated in the initial stages.
For instance
, in initial stages diabetes is not
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expensive
to treat and basic medication is sufficient,
however
if is not diagnosed and treated then it can lead to complications such as renal failure, cardiac stroke which requires
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expensive
surgeries.

To conclude
, investing in
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public
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health
by offering
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free
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services
is
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important
for each
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country
. For
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expensive
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treatments
,
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government
should try to
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prevent
such diseases in initial stages by providing basic healthcare
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treatment
.
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IELTS essay : Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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