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Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. v.6

Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. v. 6
Mixed opinions exist among people in relation to how globalisation influences the economies of the world. Some argue that it is evident that globalisation has brought dramatic economic growths and more employment opportunities around the world, particularly in the developing countries. However, there are criticisms raised to remind people of negative impacts that are caused by globalisation. Economy and employment have been thriving in some developing countries for the last 30 years since globalisation first formed its concept. Countries, such as China, India, and South Africa, which had once struggled with economic developments, are largely affected when most giant international corporations moved to nations where tax rates are lower and labour rates are cheaper. This particular wave has created enormous new businesses in less developed countries. Therefore, both economics and employments have been promoted significantly by globalisation. However, some economists and sociologists believe that globalisation has not created jobs globally; rather, it simply shifted employment opportunities from developed countries to developing countries. As a result, when China is experiencing high job growth, The United States, on the other hand, is suffering from the high unemployment rate. They also claim that globalisation encourages dependency on other countries so that if one country’s economy collapses, it is very likely that other countries’ economies will be damaged as well. The 2008 global economic crisis had well demonstrated how this dependent relationship worked very negatively among countries during the crisis. In conclusion, globalisation plays a major role in pushing economic and employment developments forward in developing countries; however, evidence has suggested that it has negative impacts on industrialised countries in terms of economic and labour market growths. Moreover, the unhealthy dependence among countries is another concern in relation to globalisation.
Mixed opinions exist among
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people
in relation to how
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globalisation
influences the economies of the world.
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Some
argue that it is evident that
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globalisation
has brought dramatic
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economic
growths and more
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employment
opportunities around the world,
particularly
in the
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developing
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countries
.
However
, there are criticisms raised to remind
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people
of
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negative
impacts that
are caused
by
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globalisation
.

Economy and
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employment
have been thriving in
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some
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developing
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countries
for the last 30 years since
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globalisation
first
formed its concept.
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Countries
, such as China, India, and South Africa, which had once struggled with
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economic
developments, are
largely
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affected
when most giant international corporations
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moved
to nations where tax rates are lower and
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labour
rates are cheaper. This particular wave has created enormous new businesses in less developed
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countries
.
Therefore
, both
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economics
and
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employments
have
been promoted
significantly
by
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globalisation
.

However
,
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some
economists and sociologists believe that
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globalisation
has not created jobs globally;
rather
, it
simply
shifted
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employment
opportunities from developed
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countries
to
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developing
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countries
.
As a result
, when China is experiencing high job growth, The United States,
on the other hand
, is suffering from the high unemployment rate.

They
also
claim that
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globalisation
encourages dependency on other
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countries
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so
that if one
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country’s
economy collapses, it is
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very
likely that other
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countries’
economies will
be damaged
as well
. The 2008 global
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economic
crisis had well demonstrated how this dependent relationship worked
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very
negatively
among
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countries
during the crisis.

In conclusion
,
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globalisation
plays a major role in pushing
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economic
and
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employment
developments forward in
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developing
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countries
;
however
, evidence has suggested that it has
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negative
impacts on
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industrialised
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countries
in terms of
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economic
and
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labour
market growths.
Moreover
, the unhealthy dependence among
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countries
is another concern in relation to
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globalisation
.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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