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Ethnic group in different places in Vietnam

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The ethnic minority people in my village are very friendly. A few months ago, I journeyed to Lao Cai, a predominantly ethnic minority area in Vietnam’s Northern Mountains, to supervise a pilot survey. One older man I encountered—typical of many we saw—was a subsistence farmer with minimal education who spoke only his native language and had barely ventured beyond his village. Members of ethnic minority groups make up 15 percent of the country’s population but account for 70 percent of the extreme poor (measured using a national extreme poverty line). During Vietnam’s two decades of rapid growth, members of ethnic minority groups in the country have experienced overall improvements in their standards of living, but their gains have lagged behind those of the Kinh majority.
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in my village are
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friendly. A few months ago, I journeyed to Lao
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area in Vietnam’s Northern Mountains, to supervise a pilot survey. One older
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—was a subsistence farmer with minimal education who spoke
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account for 70 percent of the extreme poor (measured using a national extreme poverty line). During Vietnam’s two decades of rapid growth, members of
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IELTS essay Ethnic group in different places in Vietnam

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