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Conjunction of junk food is leading to obesity fullstop to what extent do you agree or disagree.

Conjunction of junk food is leading to obesity fullstop E7Qwx
in this contemporary Era, there is a intense argument over the issue that people are gaining more weight and becoming unfit because of they consume high amount of unhealthy food. This essay is completely agree with the statement. Nowadays, because of the hectic schedule people don't get enough time to make food and because of that they order food from outside. For example, an article published in "The Times" stated that 70% of people in the UK are working and because of that they don't get enough time for cooking. Furthermore, In todays period it is very easy to get fast food because numerous food joints have been open. In addition, nowadays fast food are very pocket friendly and because of that people are becoming habital to eat outside. Is fastfood the only reason for people being unhealthy? No, there are many other reasons. First of all, nowadays people are becoming lethargic and they like to leave sedentary lifestyle. in addition, people don't want to do any type of exercise to stay fit; Perhaps this might be the main reason behind obesity and unhealthy lifestyle. To put it in a nutshell, we cannot deny that consumption of fast food makes people obese but there are other reasons too which cannot be overlooked.
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in
this contemporary Era, there is
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intense argument over the issue that
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people
are gaining more weight and becoming unfit
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consume high amount of unhealthy
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food
. This essay is completely
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agree
with the statement.

Nowadays,
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because
of the hectic schedule
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people
don't
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get
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enough
time to
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make
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food
and
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because
of that they order
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food
from outside.
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, an article published in
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The Times
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stated that 70% of
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people
in the UK are working and
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because
of that they don't
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get
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enough
time for cooking.
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easy to
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fast
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food
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because
numerous
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joints have been open.
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, nowadays
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are
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pocket friendly and
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are becoming
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fastfood
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being unhealthy? No, there are
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lethargic and
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leave
sedentary lifestyle.
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in
addition,
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people
don't want to do any type of exercise to stay fit; Perhaps this might be the main
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reason
behind obesity and unhealthy lifestyle.

To put it in a nutshell, we cannot deny that consumption of
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fast
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food
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makes
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obese
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IELTS essay Conjunction of junk food is leading to obesity fullstop

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
212 words
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