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Essey about the shopping mall

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In the future, the main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop. I agree this statement. Firstly, most people shop online, if we build the shopping mall, they will come there for making, seeing, and shopping different things. People enjoy shopping at malls with friends. Because, there have cinemas, bowling alleys, restaurants. Secondly at the mall you can try on different and beautiful clothes and get advice on products from shop assistants. Today's shops have not got such as chances. Thirdly, shops and entertainment are under one roof. Nowadays, also, we have a lot of shops, but, not are under one roof. They are situated dispersed however, at the malls will be all the thing together, what we want to shop. I think, at the malls have the brand goods, you love. There are a great deal of malls all over the world. For example: Luton malls, Dubai malls, Mall of Berlin and so on. We have also mall called " New Life"in Navoi city. Fourthly, there will have internet called wi-fi. If we have not got any money, we may ise its internet recources. Of course, you shoul pay for using it. We do not have to go another place. Shopping malls are really convenient because shopping in such places can also be more economical and also you can compare prices at different shops since they are all do close to one another. If I am not at a mall, I will probably buy the first thing I see, without comparing it with some thing similar at another shop. Finally, going to malls fun, cause of there are also cafes, and cinemas there, as well as video game arcades. Tjat means a shoppinh mall is a great place to go for entertainment with your friends as there are plenty of other things to do besides shopping.
In the future, the main reason for going to the
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will be for entertainment, not to
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. I
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this statement.
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, most
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people
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shop
online, if we build the
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shopping
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mall
, they will
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come
there for making, seeing, and
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shopping
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different
things.
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People
enjoy
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shopping
at
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malls
with friends.
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Because
, there have cinemas, bowling alleys, restaurants.
Secondly
at the
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mall
you can try on
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different
and
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beautiful
clothes and
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get
advice on products from
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shop
assistants.
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Today
's
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shops
have not
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got
such as chances.
Thirdly
,
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shops
and entertainment are under one roof. Nowadays,
also
, we have
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a lot of
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shops
,
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but
, not are under one roof. They
are situated
dispersed
however
, at the
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malls
will be all the thing together, what we want to
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shop
. I
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think
, at the
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malls
have the brand
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goods
, you
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love
. There are a great
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deal
of
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malls
all over the world.
For example
:
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Luton
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malls
, Dubai
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malls
,
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Mall
of Berlin and
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so
on. We have
also
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mall
called
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New Life
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"
in
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Navoi
city.
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, there will have internet called
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wi-fi
. If we have not
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got
any money, we may
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its internet
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recources
.
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, you
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shoul
pay for using it. We do not
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go another place.
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malls
are
really
convenient
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because
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in such places can
also
be more economical and
also
you can compare prices at
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different
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shops
since they are all do close to one another. If I am not at a
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mall
, I will
probably
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buy
the
first
thing I
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see
, without comparing it with
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some thing
similar at another
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shop
.
Finally
, going to
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malls
fun, cause of there are
also
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cafes
, and cinemas there,
as well
as video game arcades.
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means a
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shoppinh
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mall
is a great place to go for entertainment with your friends as there are
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plenty
of other things to do
besides
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shopping
.
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IELTS essay Essey about the shopping mall

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
314 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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