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Essay topics: TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake v.1

Essay topics: TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake v. 1
Recently there has been much interest in gaining a better understanding of the happiest time in todays' citizen's life. Some feel that despite of responsibilities, adulthood is the best time to be happy. However, I agree with those who are of the opinion that childhood is the significant time to live happiest lifestyle. In this essay, I will provide the rationale for my viewpoint as well as adduce all the arguments which might support my own belief. Those who espouse the former opinion claim that adults will have freedom to pursue their interests and hobbies. The proponents of this view maintain that in childhood, some activities such as hiking, riding a motorbike, etc. , are limited for certain age groups. As these activities are considered as dangerous, usually those children's parents do not allow their children to participate. Hence, they do not get a chance to enjoy fully. My classmate, Tina, is a shining example of this. She was passionate about horse racing. However, due to her age restriction and unsupportive family did not allow her to participate in that activity, and that still makes her sad. However, one would argue that there is more to the story than this Tina's example tells. Personally, I firmly believe that children will live more happily because they will have less stress compared to adults. It goes without saying that these kids do not think about their future, so they enjoy their present time with lots of joy and happiness. In sharp contrast, adults always have some kind of tension, such as, expenditure, future work opportunity, on top of their mind. As a result, the adults will have more stress and they will not be able to enjoy their lives as happy as they used to do during their youth period. Maybe there is some truth in this claim, and some empirical evidence can be provided to support it. A 2007 survey, for instance, conducted by a team of researchers at the University of Toronto found that 90% of university graduates claimed that they were happier in their childhood because they didn't have to worry about competing with other students at school. To sum up, although some adults may find adulthood is the happiest time to live in modern life because they can conduct their own interest and hobbies. Nevertheless, I still hold to the opinion that, youth will be happier because they will have less stress to worry about their future life.
Recently there has been much interest in gaining a better understanding of the happiest
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time
in
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todays
' citizen's life.
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feel that
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despite of
responsibilities, adulthood is the best
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time
to be happy.
However
, I
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agree
with those who are of the opinion that childhood is the significant
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time
to
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live
happiest lifestyle. In this essay, I will provide the rationale for my viewpoint
as well
as adduce all the arguments which might support my
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own
belief.

Those who espouse the former opinion claim that
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adults
will have freedom to pursue their interests and hobbies. The proponents of this view maintain that in childhood,
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some
activities such as hiking, riding a motorbike, etc.
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,
are limited
for certain age groups. As these activities
are considered
as
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dangerous
,
usually
those children's parents do not
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allow
their children to participate.
Hence
, they do not
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get
a chance to enjoy
fully
. My classmate, Tina, is a shining example of this. She was passionate about horse racing.
However
, due to her age restriction and
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unsupportive
family did not
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allow
her to participate in that activity, and that
still
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makes
her sad.

However
, one would argue that there is more to the story than this Tina's example
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tells
.
Personally
, I
firmly
believe that children will
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live
more
happily
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because
they will have less
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stress
compared to
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adults
. It goes without saying that these kids do not
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think
about their future,
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so
they enjoy their present
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time
with lots of joy and happiness. In sharp contrast,
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adults
always have
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some
kind of tension, such as, expenditure, future work opportunity, on top of their mind.
As a result
, the
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adults
will have more
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stress and
they will not be able to enjoy their
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lives
as happy as they
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used
to do during their youth period. Maybe there is
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some
truth in this claim, and
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some
empirical evidence can
be provided
to support it. A 2007 survey,
for instance
, conducted by a team of researchers at the University of Toronto found that 90% of university graduates claimed that they were happier in their childhood
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because
they didn't
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have to
worry about competing with other students at school.

To sum up, although
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some
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adults
may find adulthood is the happiest
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time
to
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live
in modern life
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because
they can conduct their
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own
interest and hobbies.
Nevertheless
, I
still
hold to the opinion that, youth will be happier
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because
they will have less
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stress
to worry about their future life.
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IELTS essay Essay topics: TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
410 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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